All of us should take a deep concern with that there are more crimes in many countries. This phenomenon, which is abnormal, refects various issues of our society, including the gap bewteen rich and poor as well as the unlimited media development. I contend that the governments and our society should take more actions to prevent this inflation.
To begin with, as some minority owning more and more wealth, the majority group of people's incomes are not compatible with the development in many countries. Thus their hates toward people with much higher income are brewing. To some threshold, the negative emotion explodes by the means of crimes. These kind of tragedies , rich people got killed by poor, are usual in large cities like Beijing and Shanghai,as we know the great development in China also enlarge the gap between the two groups of people.
Addionally, the unlimited media is steering the whole society in worong directions. The youth would like to follow their movie stars actions in some gangsta films. Especially some episodes like "Breaking Bad", not only teaching people how to make drugs but also show us how to kill people in chemical way without traces as the bodies were melt in solutions, are influencing people's curiosities and anger to the communites they live in. Then, in China and Mexico, these kind of crimes happens a lot annually. The violence and revenge played by these actors are the best catalysts to people, once got chance, they would like to do this to revenge even kill others.
Admittedly, we can never live in a world with no crime since we are human beings with heterogenous thoughts and emotions rather than robots. However, we can lower down the number of crimes by actions not only from the government but also from our whole society. Firstly, the government should take specifilc rules like high taxations from rich and reduce the gap bwtween the rich and poor. Also, create more job positions for poor people, aiming to increase their incomes. The whole society should be calm down with anger and fight against violence which may cause crime.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 159, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...with the development in many countries. Thus their hates toward people with much hig...
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Line 3, column 300, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'These kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; These kinds
...motion explodes by the means of crimes. These kind of tragedies , rich people got killed b...
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Line 3, column 323, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...means of crimes. These kind of tragedies , rich people got killed by poor, are usu...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , as
...n large cities like Beijing and Shanghai,as we know the great development in China ...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'melted', 'molten'.
Suggestion: melted; molten
...l way without traces as the bodies were melt in solutions, are influencing peoples c...
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Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...hey live in. Then, in China and Mexico, these kind of crimes happens a lot annually. The v...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, then, thus, well, kind of, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1755.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 353.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9716713881 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4706987266 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56657223796 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1499999216 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.235294118 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7647058824 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94117647059 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170210868418 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0526247652897 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602159917776 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0962482629278 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0620712074122 0.056905535591 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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