It is known that using cultural traditions for tourism purposes will damage their value. There is also a school of thought that this is the sole way to protect and develop them. In my opinion, both views are true to some certain extents.
From my perspective, the commercialization of cultural traditions in tourism relatively brings many negative impacts. To begin with, when traditional cultures are used for tourism purposes, many sacred sites are heavily damaged by the irresponsible behaviors of tourists. For example, they draw graffiti on famous structures such as the symbol of the hand on the Golden Bridge on the top of Ba Na Hill, a mountainous amusement park in Da Nang City. Besides, being lured by the power of money, many traditional customs can be totally adapted to suit tourists’ demands, which loses the original beauty and value of these traditions. For example, Vietnamese traditional dances such as the lion dance, which were traditionally performed by martial artists to propagate cultural values and celebrate crucial meanings during special occasions, but now, it is often performed by amateurs to just earn as much as money at tourist sites across the country. Such changes not only give foreign visitors a false impression but can also make the dance less meaningful to the local people.
On the other hand, there are several reasons why monetizing from cultural traditions is the solution only to protect them. First, when these cultural values are used for tourism, The unique cultural characteristics of each region will be known by more people around the world, which makes people have a well up on general knowledge. For instance when visitors came to Vietnam to travel, not only can see spectacular scenery of the nature of Vietnam, explore local cuisine and specialties, but they can also see the Vietnamese people wearing “Ao dai which is the traditional clothes here. From there, more people will know about these clothes which help increase their value and help them to last longer. Second, It can both generate profits provide people improvements/enhancements in their understanding of cultural traditions, and also preserve such traditions. And from this profit, government constructs museums and galleries to display cultural traditions as well as organize many presentations to explain and introduce the values of those cultural traditions to protect and develop it.
In conclusion, while some argue that the commercialization of cultural traditions in tourism has many negative impacts on their value, I hold the belief that it still has many positive aspects.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 542, Rule ID: EN_UNPAIRED_BRACKETS
Message: Unpaired symbol: '”' seems to be missing
... also see the Vietnamese people wearing “Ao dai which is the traditional clothes ...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, second, so, still, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2205.0 1615.20841683 137% => OK
No of words: 417.0 315.596192385 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28776978417 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96706556733 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 176.041082164 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546762589928 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 685.8 506.74238477 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.8089089714 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.8125 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0625 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5625 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291348599626 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0971269325781 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.035730952067 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173261510982 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0526999015806 0.056905535591 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 542, Rule ID: EN_UNPAIRED_BRACKETS
Message: Unpaired symbol: '”' seems to be missing
... also see the Vietnamese people wearing “Ao dai which is the traditional clothes ...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, second, so, still, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2205.0 1615.20841683 137% => OK
No of words: 417.0 315.596192385 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28776978417 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96706556733 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 176.041082164 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546762589928 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 685.8 506.74238477 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.8089089714 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.8125 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0625 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5625 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291348599626 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0971269325781 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.035730952067 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173261510982 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0526999015806 0.056905535591 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.