There are many different types of music in the world today Why do we need music Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays

It is a fact that the kinds of music are so various and they are more and more now. Music is a vital part of people's lives and I believe that the International music that is popular far and wide is more essential.
Music nowaday is very necessary for many people because of its benefits to us and there are three main advantages of listening to music. Firstly, music can impact our relationships. Researchers think one of the most important functions of music is to create a feeling of cohesion or social connectedness. Another thing is that music is used as a method which helps people regulate their emotions. Listening to music can help people relax and calm after a stressful event and have better physical and mental health. For instance, studies indicate that relaxing music helped reduce fatigue and maintain muscle endurance when people were engaged in a repetitive task. As a result, people can reduce the symptoms of depression or the incidence of heart-related diseases. One more incredible thing, music is significantly useful in working. This is because our mind can be affected by the melody and lyrics. It can help students concentrate and absorb the knowledge more easily, and employers listen to music to keep them motivated and more active. Therefore, productivity and effectiveness increase considerably.
According to the benefits that music may bring to people, we cannot deny that all kinds of music are “therapists” that heal our souls. However, International music now is more well-known and beloved, which can show the importance of that kind of music for people. Traditional music of a country cannot be absorbed by all people, but it just reflects the cultures, values and beliefs of a community. By contrast, International music can appeal to almost everyone including the elders or the youth because its melody is very catchy, the lyrics are easy to listen and the meanings are clarified. Moreover, International music has so many songs that touch the listener’s soul, while the classical one is limited about the content. For example, Vietnamese folk music is limited to writing songs about love where the characters show too much emotion. Notwithstanding, the music of youth is easier to show the love to each other. Furthermore, in this age, International music is created for everyone, not fixed internationality, so people in any country can also enjoy this music. I strongly think that this is a way to connect us together.
To sum up, music plays a central role in people’s spirits and I am of the opinion that International music is given more importance than traditional music because of those fore-mentioned reasons.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, another thing, for example, for instance, kind of, as a result, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 13.1623246493 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 10.4138276553 211% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2227.0 1615.20841683 138% => OK
No of words: 440.0 315.596192385 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06136363636 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9901344327 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513636363636 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.0 506.74238477 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8872702616 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8260869565 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1304347826 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.34782608696 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.67935871743 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.465493245343 0.244688304435 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154804487418 0.084324248473 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0980200366337 0.0667982634062 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.342505304452 0.151304729494 226% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040393649075 0.056905535591 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 78.4519038076 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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