In many countries the governments like to spend more money on the arts Some people agree with this However others think government should spend more on health and education Discuss both sides and give your opinion | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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In many countries the governments like to spend more money on the arts Some people agree with this However others think government should spend more on health and education Discuss both sides and give your opinion

It is true that countries invest more and more money in facilities to serve human needs. Some people think that the government should spend more money on art activities, I side with those who argued health and education are more important and the state should focus on it.
On the one hand , proponents of the view that government should have a large budget exclusively for arts activities have two reasons to support their argument.First, studies have shown that expression through art can help people with depression, anxiety, and stress.This is perfectly exemplified in case of medical method, art therapy helps patients process feelings and helps therapists understand what areas to explore with the patient. This therapeutic approach encompasses a wide range of creative expressions, such as dance, music, drawing, painting, coloring, sculpting and more. Second, the art could gain profit, this helps to promote economic development of the country which has a number of famous art forms. From this, it become a fanancial resource to erect the figure of essential sectors and infrastructure investment. Simultaneously, creating enormous labor market to solve unemployment problem.
On the other hand, opponents of the idea that health and education are essential blocks for a country's wealth. Furthermore, People who pay taxes out of their hard-earned money thinks it should spend on hospitals and schools to avoid a crisis on catastrophe stage. To illustrate, during the 2nd wave of coronavirus, India suffered a lot due to the scarcity of beds in hospitals and people started dying due to the lack of facilities. Many business tycoons fled to other countries where health infrastructure is good. In my ,opinion as well Art is the secondary need of person so government should focus on building more hospitals and learning institutes and maintaining their quality.
In conclusion, after deliberating the views of both the points it can succinctly state that public's education and their well-being is more important than other things.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, second, so, well, as to, in conclusion, such as, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1725.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35714285714 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97162340777 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60248447205 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 88.4310984417 49.4020404114 179% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.692307692 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7692307692 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84615384615 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.412786119478 0.244688304435 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124858433808 0.084324248473 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114180268376 0.0667982634062 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246312407957 0.151304729494 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.141265951953 0.056905535591 248% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, second, so, well, as to, in conclusion, such as, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments