Some people believe that in order to thrive, a society must put its own overall success before the well-being of its individual citizens. Others believe that the well-being of a society can only be measured by the general welfare of all its people.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
A society as a whole thrives only when all its citizens are happy and content. In this context, a society can be thought of vaguely as a group of citizens residing in a country, state or province. In my opinion, I mostly agree with the second argument that the well being of a society can be measured by the general welfare of all its people for the following two reasons.
To begin, when we talk about any society, the most fundamental part of it, are the citizens themselves. The citizen’s needs and comforts are the of atmost importance and these need to be addressed before any other issue is brought to the table. For example, take the case of the Bhutan, which is the only country that measures its success in the form of happiness index. They believe that, if the citizens of their country are happy and content, then there is no need to consider the monetary aspects such as ‘per capita income’ or the GDP to measure the success of the society. Thus, I believe that if the citizens of a society are ‘content’, then the society as an overall is bound to excel in all aspects.
Furthermore, other aspects of a society like equality, fraternity stem directly from the root, that is the citizens. If the citizens themselves consider each an every member of the society like a family member without considering their race or any other prejudice, then the society as a whole develops a healthy atmosphere. In a recent study, it was found that some tribes in Africa lead a much happier life as compared to their counterparts in another region of the world. This success was attributed to the fact that, even with their meager incomes and substandard health facilities, they embrace each and every member of their tribe as their own and live in synergy with nature. There can be no better proof that, if the citizens are compassionate towards each other and are happy in their company, then the society is bound to thrive.
In contrast, I also feel that, in some cases, a society must put its own overall success before the well-being of its individual citizens. There are some decisions that need to be taken, even if it comes at a cost of compromising the well-being of some citizens of the society. This is because, the world (even if we believe it to be) is not an ideal place and some collateral damage is unavoidable. But, it is imperative to say that, such decisions must be avoided as far as possible and even if they are taken, then they should be done after the consensus of the involved parties. Thus, in conclusion, we can say that citizens form an integral and inseparable part of the society and the society as a whole will thrive only when all its citizens are happy.
| Post date | Users | Rates | Link to Content |
|---|---|---|---|
| 2023-07-19 | okazaki11 | 50 | view |
| 2023-03-11 | ramaand | 62 | view |
| 2022-09-25 | raghavchauhan619 | 83 | view |
| 2022-09-25 | raghavchauhan619 | 83 | view |
| 2022-09-25 | raghavchauhan619 | 83 | view |
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you t 62
- The following was written by a group of developers in the city of Monroe A jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise At present the nearest jazz club is over 60 miles away from Monroe thus our proposed club the C Note would h 78
- Arctic deer live on islands in Canada s arctic regions They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough at le 72
- Claim We can usually learn much more from people whose views we share than from those whose views contradict our own Reason Disagreement can cause stress and inhibit learning Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree 62
- The main benefit of the study of history is to dispel the illusion that people living now are significantly different from people who lived in earlier times Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement 58
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, second, so, then, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, in my opinion, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.5258426966 169% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2213.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 481.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60083160083 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58352963386 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.43659043659 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 723.6 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.6909010822 60.3974514979 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.944444444 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7222222222 23.4991977007 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.55555555556 5.21951772744 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.50165511778 0.243740707755 206% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16340638713 0.0831039109588 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11871027251 0.0758088955206 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.327664854053 0.150359130593 218% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.142292420944 0.0667264976115 213% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 12.1639044944 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, second, so, then, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, in my opinion, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.5258426966 169% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2213.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 481.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60083160083 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58352963386 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.43659043659 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 723.6 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.6909010822 60.3974514979 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.944444444 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7222222222 23.4991977007 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.55555555556 5.21951772744 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.50165511778 0.243740707755 206% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16340638713 0.0831039109588 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11871027251 0.0758088955206 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.327664854053 0.150359130593 218% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.142292420944 0.0667264976115 213% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 12.1639044944 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.