The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. [Specific Task Instruction: Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.]
The speaker claims that sense of cooperation is more important than sense of competition for young people in society nowadays in order to prepare them for the role of leaders. I partly agree with this view.
Cooperation plays an increasingly vital part in the science field as human beings gain more knowledge about the world around us. If we take a look at the Nobel Prize nominees in recent years and compare them with the list decades ago, we'll find that while it was relatively more common for a single person to be nominated before the 21 century, recently it is more often that a team submitted their contribution instead of a person, which informs us that however talented and hardworking one person might be, he or she still needs to work with others for more chance of success.
It is not only the case with scientist that cooperation needs to be empasized. Without the result of teamwork, many of the devices we use daily which facilitates our convenience largely may not even exist. Take our Iphone or Ipad as an example. While it is common sense that Steve Jobs founded the Apple company from with these devices mentioned before were invented and produced, relatively few people are aware that Steve Jobs didn't start the company alone, but co-founded it with his friend Wozniak, without whose help Apple might not be what it is today.
Admittedly, competition should not be neglected as we live in a world with a population over 7 billion. Competition sometimes leads to better solutions to certain problems which will no doutedly increase the quality of our lives. Such is the case in the American election, party leaders have to compete with each other by coming up with proposals more attractive to most of its citizens in order to get elected. However, placing too much significance on competing may sometimes go wrong. If nominees focus on attaching each other instead, nobody would benefit from it.
In conclusion, while we should not deny the importance of competition, it is cooperation that plays a more decisive part in today's world and tomorrow.
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- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition Specific Task Instruction Write a response in which you discuss the extent to whic 58
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 138, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... of teamwork, many of the devices we use daily which facilitates our convenience ...
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Line 5, column 431, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ly few people are aware that Steve Jobs didnt start the company alone, but co-founded...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, may, so, still, well, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1727.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 354.0 442.535393258 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87853107345 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60441100549 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598870056497 0.4932671777 121% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 108.196721818 60.3974514979 179% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.357142857 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2857142857 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 5.21951772744 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157423021169 0.243740707755 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.051781220764 0.0831039109588 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0781681197339 0.0758088955206 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100942006522 0.150359130593 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0936565779778 0.0667264976115 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.