The beginning of the 21st century has witnessed a worrying trend of childhood obesity in several countries. In the face of this issue, many netizens have held the government accountable for this phenomenon due to the presence of advertisements for unhealthy food in the media. I partly disagree with this issue for the following reasons.
On the one hand, one should hold responsibility for his health since it is a matter of self-discipline. As only one himself has the most comprehensive understanding and complete control over his own schedules and diets, he should easily track down the roots of his physical problems and thus, actively rearrange his routines to tackle the problem. Regarding kids who are genetically susceptible to gaining or losing weight, their attitude toward their bodies still plays a pivotal role in their health status. While these children should be provided with designated meal and exercise plans from experts, it is their perseverance and patience that determine the outcome of the treatment.
On the other hand, the government should also participate in rectifying the situation. One of the main reasons behind the rising rate of overweight children is their exposure to advertisements for unhealthy food in the media. In response to this issue, the authorities ought to execute strict censorship against these kinds of content or impose age limits on junk food commercials. Additionally, governmental bodies should also increase taxes on these products in order to restrict their sales and attraction toward youngsters.
In conclusion, as the rate of obesity continues to rise in various nations, the problem can only be solved through joint efforts from different parties. While each individual should acknowledge the importance of a balanced lifestyle, governmental officials should also take action to hinder the growing popularity of unhealthy products.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, regarding, so, still, thus, while, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1603.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43389830508 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02710156201 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4897088303 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.307692308 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6923076923 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92307692308 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208546286647 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695327473415 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531817294581 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121357172882 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0489432026566 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.51 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, regarding, so, still, thus, while, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1603.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.43389830508 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02710156201 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 492.3 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4897088303 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.307692308 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6923076923 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92307692308 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208546286647 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695327473415 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531817294581 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121357172882 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0489432026566 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.51 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.