In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have the responsibility to solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
These days, childhood obesity has become a typical sign of deteriorating public health over the world. In this regard, some people believe that governments should take full responsibility to find the solutions for this problem. While I side with this opinion, I also agree that not only authorities but also parents play a vital role in dealing with the issue.
On the one hand, there are a host of reasons why governments have to assume responsibility for children’s obesity. First and foremost, there are not enough public green spaces provided by them in some cities. Most policymakers are inclined to put a priority on meeting housing demands because of the ever-increasing population in metropolises. Urban areas, therefore, might be turned into concrete jungles with blocks and apartments as well. In a long run, authorities fail to invest in constructing parks and public open spaces, which leads to the fact that citizens, especially young people, might not have a chance to engage in physical activities. Furthermore, enterprises are likely to be allowed to make exaggerated and false claims about their products, which are shown in TV commercials on a daily basis. Those, consequently, attract and encourage children to eat unhealthy food with insufficient amount of fiber and nutrients.
On the other hand, I believe that the duty to combat obesity in children should not fall on the government alone because parents are, for good reasons, a greater source of influence on children’s lifestyle. One of the main causes that make children overweight and unhealthy is the choice of daily diet by their parents. Most adults might be snowed under with work and lead a hectic life, which renders them fail to prepare home-cooked meals with sufficient nutrients for their families. They, as a consequence, tend to opt for convenience and unhealthy food as well, which may lead to their kids’ obesity.
To conclude, governments should of course do what they can to curb the childhood obesity epidemic in modern society. Also, I strongly believe that parents need to take responsibility for their children’s unhealthy condition as well.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, of course, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1808.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22543352601 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95761769375 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578034682081 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.3465222948 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.0 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.625 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.875 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251589713518 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0755166759277 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.073740411291 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15748268254 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0678491272586 0.056905535591 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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