Nowadays youth tend to enjoy their spare time with electronic devices. Therefore, it is believed that children are needed to allocate more time to play outdoor sports. I agree with the aforementioned statement.
To begin with, in modern society, there is a tendency that children prefer a sedentary lifestyle. To be specific, advanced technology enables youth to experience a virtual world and convenient lifestyle. By using the technology, children do not have to go out to meet their friends because they can communicate with their peers via chatting messengers and play video games together connecting each other online. As well as that, it is quite addictive so that youth spend most of their free time on them. Therefore, this phenomenon is prevalent and it causes insufficient physical activities such as soccer to children.
To alleviate this issue, outdoor activities should be encouraged to children by building more infrastructures and educating children results of the lack of exercise. Firstly, it is true that insufficient sports infrastructures lead to this phenomenon. Take Korea as an example, in Korea, there are few facilities to do exercise, so it contributes to a lack of exercise as well as addiction to electronic devices. Therefore, it seems compulsory to build more facilities and hold campaigns to make children take part in sports activities. Secondly, it is important to educate children about the bad results of a sedentary lifestyle. In school, children should be taught lack of exercise could cause some diseases like diabetes and high blood pressure then they will prone to join physical activities to stay healthy. As a result, children will spend more time on outdoor activities to prevent illness.
In conclusion, I believe that encouraging children to take part in physical activities is indispensable and it will play a significant role in staying healthy for children.
- Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child s success at school Do you agree or disagree with this statement 78
- Children today are dependent on computers and electronic entertainment It would be better for them to be outside playing sports and joining in more traditional pastimes than spending all day indoors do you agree or disagree with this view 56
- Children today are dependent on computers and electronic entertainment It would be better for them to be outside playing sports and joining in more traditional pastimes than spending all day indoors do you agree or disagree with this view 89
- Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child s success at school Do you agree or disagree with this statement 56
- It is very important that children should study hard at school Time spent studying on the Internet is time wasted Do you agree or disagree You should write at least 250 words 78
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, it is true, to begin with, as well as that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1612.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3201320132 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05999154182 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544554455446 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.615676547 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.75 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9375 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0625 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218103638422 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0731981648644 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0258905048586 0.0667982634062 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129684776829 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0268571891951 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, it is true, to begin with, as well as that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1612.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3201320132 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05999154182 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544554455446 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.615676547 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.75 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9375 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0625 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218103638422 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0731981648644 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0258905048586 0.0667982634062 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129684776829 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0268571891951 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.