The availability of entertainment such as playing electronic games on portable devices will be harmful to individuals in the society they live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The quick pace of development in the fields of technological appliances and the internet has recently enhanced the ready availability of using mobile devices in today’s world. Along with the undisputable benefits they offer, I totally agree that it is a substantial factor when considering the potential risks of giving concentration on staring at digital equipment during commuting, categorizing from personal safety to social problems.
Commencing with personal perspectives, using traffic-irrelevant devices poses jeopardy to commuters due to their focus distributed to several tasks. Listening to music via earpods when traveling is a prominent instance which often occurs in our today’s youth. While this practice basically provides the advantage of relaxing, it also confines the ability of being acutely aware of potential accidents, given by neglecting vehicle’s horns from other commuters and warning alarms. Additionally, excessive use of modern appliances creates more opportunities for thieves and several crimes on streets, leading to the increasing number of criminal incidents.
Personal risks lead to broader burdens which governments and societies have to address. For example, with the very positive initiatives of fostering individuals doing physical exercises, the founders of the mobile phone game called ‘Pokemon hunting’ created a flood of residents moving amid intricate bustling areas with their eyes glued on cellphone’s screens. These local authorities introduced new regulations and rules to ban this game on traffic roads as well as other similar hazardous practices, due to the number of traffic accidents increasing since those kinds of games popularized.
In conclusion, portable devices only gain their most benefits in their boundaries of homes or safe places. They would pose more risks on both individuals and societies if they are used while commuting in terms of individuals’ safety and social securities. Therefore, it is essential to be aware of jeopardy while using portable appliances on streets.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 92, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ments and societies have to address. For example, with the very positive initiati...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1755.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.79207920792 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13311022113 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.650165016502 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.9516459056 49.4020404114 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.25 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.25 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140426721399 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.047269695634 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0360799291212 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0848381190106 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0485792361532 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 50.2224549098 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.6 12.4159519038 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.87 8.58950901804 127% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 78.4519038076 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 92, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ments and societies have to address. For example, with the very positive initiati...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1755.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.79207920792 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13311022113 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.650165016502 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.9516459056 49.4020404114 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.25 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.25 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140426721399 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.047269695634 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0360799291212 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0848381190106 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0485792361532 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 50.2224549098 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.6 12.4159519038 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.87 8.58950901804 127% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 78.4519038076 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.