More and more people are becoming overweight. Some people suggest that increasing the price of fattening food is a solution, to what extent do you agree or disagree?
The sedentary lifestyle, partly fueled by the quick development of digital technology, has significantly influenced diet patterns and physical habits of individuals, leading to a phenomenon of overweighting from over the world. While some argue that an effective solution to diminish this problem is raising the price of fat-saturation products, I do believe that there are also some other certain approaches that help this campaign achieve genuine effectiveness. In this essay, I will suggest a collaborative strategy along showing the limited impact of the mono approach of rising food prices.
At first glance, the strategic method of raising the price of unhealthy food could directly impact the consuming preference of certain resident groups, particularly those living with low incomes. However, this approach can unpredictably pave another way for food manufacturers producing food not only fattening but also more dangerous by using illegal chemistries in order to meet the needs of customers, leading to a must in addressing more intensely challenging tasks.
To strike a more holistic effectiveness of this campaign, a collaboration of other activities should be involved in, encompassing raising awareness of individuals about the negative effect of food containing fat-saturation and the stimulation from local governments and society to navigate towards a healthy lifestyle. First and foremost, opting for unhealthy products is largely driven by individuals’ personal preferences and their view on those foods as being convenient to align with their fast pace. Steering their bias about food convenience by illustrating their long-term negative influences, using the same strategy which cigarette companies have added on their product packages. Furthermore, doing regular exercises, fostered by the incentives of local society and community, also gives a hand in reaching a significant impact on reducing fatten-food intake. As the main consideration is the overall well-being of individuals, this approach can be on its horizon effectively when the amount of unnecessary fat content is under personal control.
In conclusion, while increasing the price of fattening food potentially gains its impact but inferior, an accumulated combination of self-awareness raising campaigns and governmental incentives could boost the process to be closer to success, including showing the negative effects of unhealthy food as well as the benefits of doing regular exercises.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, well, while, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2118.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 366.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.7868852459 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24575904454 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603825136612 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 667.8 506.74238477 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.2975951904 163% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.0158054423 49.4020404114 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 192.545454545 106.682146367 180% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.2727272727 20.7667163134 160% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.81818181818 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165559734973 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0603854975963 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0425701771937 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107761002049 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0250326479694 0.056905535591 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.5 13.0946893788 172% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 21.06 50.2224549098 42% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.5 11.3001002004 164% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.89 12.4159519038 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.92 8.58950901804 127% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 78.4519038076 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.1190380762 150% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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