Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In the hustle and bustle of life nowadays, commercials are appearing all around the world which might help various brands increase the number of goods that they have sold out. While I admit that the power of advertising strongly affects the decision to buy commodities of the customers, I also want to argue that the demand of consumers for that furnishings also contribute to making them give the final choice. I firmly believe large sales of famous consumer equipment rely on both things because of the following reasons.
On the one hand, advertising might influence individuals’ purchasing decisions in various ways. Initially, one of the common ways to promote the products from a brand is to hire the influencers who can experience those merchandises, and then give the positive review and approval for the items. Therefore, most of the fans will be able to pay for those things as a way to imitate the same with their idols, which is called “cheap moment”, without taking their necessity into consideration. For instance, Hoshi from SEVENTEEN, a Korean boy band, is the plenipotentiary of d’Alba which is one of the most popular skincare and make-up brands in the world. He helped to grow the sales of goods of that brand, especially the sunscreen and the facial mist because of his soft and smooth skin after using those furnishings. Moreover, in modern life, online shopping is one of the most convenient ways for humans to get something that they want without going to numerous stores to find out about those things. People just need a cellphone which is connected with the Internet to identify the items on various e-commerce platforms. The ease and convenience of online shopping nowadays enable chances for businesses to bombard their customers with countless promotions such as discounts, extra products or give away events which might manipulate the buyers that they are offered cheap prices and favorable deals while instilling fear of not getting these products at that price again. That contributes to pushing the number of products which are sold to become higher.
On the other hand, although advertising significantly affects the buyers' choices, their demands also play an important role in purchasing. First and foremost, the sustenance and subsistence which humans need to purchase on a daily basis without watching announcements. The reason is that those products which are essential for their daily activities can be purchased from familiar shops and spots. Therefore, the decisions to buy goods of individuals might not be affected by advertisements. Furthermore, medicine is one of the commodities that people cannot rely on the advertising to purchase. Because each disease requires its own medicine, the customers are only able to purchase the drugs according to doctors' prescription.
To sum up, I personally believe that while advertising undoubtedly influences the customers' decisions, the real needs of society also play a significant role in increasing the sales of popular consumer goods. Therefore, if the brands know how to control the combination of those ways, the sales of the products will grow higher and higher.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, while, for instance, such as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 7.30460921844 287% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 41.998997996 183% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2664.0 1615.20841683 165% => OK
No of words: 510.0 315.596192385 162% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22352941176 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.20363070211 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86301368603 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 176.041082164 152% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525490196078 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 813.6 506.74238477 161% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.8781364695 49.4020404114 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.2 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169492887948 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0518469709579 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421863289451 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118798411432 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372994341244 0.056905535591 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 78.4519038076 175% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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