some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. others believe that children's peer groups and parent as their role models are a much more powerful influence on children's behavior.
This issue claim's that some people believes that by increasing violence in the media will get direct affect to the society and especially to the children who are studying and want to built their future, and other people believes that not the media but the group of children which they have will affect the children mentality and the parent's whom they believe their role model can also be affected to the children's mentality.
As per author's review he is claiming that by having an more amount of voice which has been created by the media is directly affected to the society and especially to the children who are there in the society. I suggest that by the violence which has been created by the media doesn't create any bad influence to the society. As author tells that the group which children are having that can also create violence to them and i am supporting the claim which author has done. By having bad member's in the group which will affect the children's mentality and they will do what their friends are doing, not only the group of children but also the parent's to whom they believe that there are their role model.
I support the claim of author because as there will be not too much amount of violence created to the children of the society by the increasing the violence in the media, because from media there will not be too much amount of violence which that is created by the group of friends they have with them. By having their parent's as their role model they will do what their role model is doing and they will not think at one time also that the thing which they are going to do is an bad influence to their behavior so they should not do that bad thing.
Let's take an example of the group of friend who are studying in the school of India, from these the group which they are having is an gangster group and they are doing an wrong thing only and they don't do any positive thing which will not affect their behavior. As the people who are there in the group of student are doing only bad thing so by these the children which is in there group and not doing any bad thing will also think that let's do onetime thing which my friends are doing, so by these children will have an bad effect to their behavior. So by this I am supporting the claim that author has done children are affected not only due to their influence but due to their bad behavior which they get from the people with whom they are living in the society.
So from this we are on the edge of conclusion that not only the increase in the violence of media but also the group or the role model to whom they believe will also affect their behavior and will cause the bad influence on them.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'so']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.216216216216 0.240241500013 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.187258687259 0.157235817809 119% => OK
Adjectives: 0.034749034749 0.0880659088768 39% => Some adjectives wanted.
Adverbs: 0.0675675675676 0.0497285424764 136% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0714285714286 0.0444667217837 161% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.127413127413 0.12292977631 104% => OK
Participles: 0.0598455598456 0.0406280797675 147% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.01195317739 2.79330140395 72% => OK
Infinitives: 0.030888030888 0.030933414821 100% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.117760617761 0.0997080785238 118% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.030888030888 0.0249443105267 124% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0444015444015 0.0148568991511 299% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2692.0 2732.02544248 99% => OK
No of words: 502.0 452.878318584 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3625498008 6.0361032391 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.58838876751 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.233067729084 0.366273622748 64% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.157370517928 0.280924506359 56% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.105577689243 0.200843997647 53% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0358565737052 0.132149295362 27% => More words length more than 8 chars wanted.
Word Length SD: 2.01195317739 2.79330140395 72% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 219.290929204 61% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.264940239044 0.48968727796 54% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 32.123260273 55.4138127331 58% => OK
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6194690265 53% => OK
Sentence length: 45.6363636364 23.380412469 195% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 79.0262013251 59.4972553346 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 244.727272727 141.124799967 173% => OK
Words per sentence: 45.6363636364 23.380412469 195% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 0.272727272727 0.674092028746 40% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.21349557522 211% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 61.3734154292 51.4728631049 119% => OK
Elegance: 1.23668639053 1.64882698954 75% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.406721173579 0.391690518653 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.329501699103 0.123202303941 267% => Sentence is so close to another sentence.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0935651451815 0.077325440228 121% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.773321074121 0.547984918172 141% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.122010031516 0.149214159877 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.249111033057 0.161403998019 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.075376319509 0.0892212321368 84% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.615985953361 0.385218514788 160% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0759415187803 0.0692045440612 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.32880024653 0.275328986314 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0512467556901 0.0653680567796 78% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 10.4325221239 10% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.30420353982 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88274336283 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 1.0 7.22455752212 14% => More positive topic words wanted.
Negative topic words: 9.0 3.66592920354 246% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.70907079646 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 10.0 13.5995575221 74% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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