Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Some people believe that juveniles should pursue long-term and realistic goals. However, others have the opposite view. As far as I am concerned, the former point carries more weight. I take this position on account for the following reasons.
The first and most important reason is that the long-term goals can improve juveniles’ characters. In fact, if the teenager wants to reach these kinds of goals, he needs to make many efforts and have accurate plans for this. Sooner or later, he learns have manager his time and energy, discipline, more focus. In addition, he will learn to ignore someone who says that it is not possible. Moreover, he learns to accept constructive criticism and use them to strengthen his personality. I think that a small example can give some light to this matter. Mohammad Ali Klee, who is a great American boxer, achieved plenty of medals and honors in the boxing, because of regular practice and more efforts. At that time, he started his practice in this filed of sport, no one could imagine he could be a great athletes in the USA. Nowadays, people know him not only because of his honors, but also as an indication of efforts.
A further point we must consider is that juveniles can be more successful when they have realistic goals. Most juveniles have not correct understanding of their talents, and most act according their interested. In the most cases, they can not gain a striking achievement, because their goals were not base on the reality and their facilities. Nevertheless, if a goal base on our facilities and talents, we will be success. I think there is not a better example then Cristiano Ronaldo the former player in Manchester United. When he was a child--unlike a most young people – had a deeper understanding of his talent in the football. So, he left home, when he have 12 years old, and went to other cities for flourishing his abilities. Despite the fact he spend many time for improve his abilities, eventually; he could be a great football player.
In contrast, it is difficult for juveniles have to make plans, and spend much time and energy to reach the long-terms goals. Indeed, they tend to have immediate aims, because they do not need to wait much time for gaining the goal. In addition, long time for reaching the goal can decrease the juveniles’ enthusiasm for make an effort, and also they usually have not enough knowledge to have the real goals. However, the immediate goal, which is base on their desire, stimulates them for increase attempt. Young people, who have not strong personalities, can not continue their efforts, and give up.
All above evidence supports this fact that the long-term and realistic aims build juveniles’ personality, and help them to being more successful. Of course, as an English proverb goes “a coin has two sides”; therefore, those who have the opposite view partially reasonable that it is difficult to reach the long-term goals. Nonetheless, its benefits outweigh dangerous.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 258, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to have'
Suggestion: to have
...ns for this. Sooner or later, he learns have manager his time and energy, discipline...
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Line 3, column 808, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'athlete'?
Suggestion: athlete
...o one could imagine he could be a great athletes in the USA. Nowadays, people know him n...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 525, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...the former player in Manchester United. When he was a child--unlike a most young peo...
^^^^
Line 5, column 659, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...the football. So, he left home, when he have 12 years old, and went to other cities ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 659, Rule ID: HAVE_CD_YEARS[1]
Message: This phrase is used with 'be': 'be 12 years old'.
Suggestion: be 12 years old
...the football. So, he left home, when he have 12 years old, and went to other cities for flourishi...
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Line 5, column 754, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'spends'.
Suggestion: spends
...hing his abilities. Despite the fact he spend many time for improve his abilities, ev...
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Line 5, column 760, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'many times'.
Suggestion: many times
...is abilities. Despite the fact he spend many time for improve his abilities, eventually; ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'nevertheless', 'nonetheless', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'thus', 'i think', 'in addition', 'in contrast', 'in fact', 'of course']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.225589225589 0.240241500013 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.139730639731 0.157235817809 89% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0942760942761 0.0880659088768 107% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0589225589226 0.0497285424764 118% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0740740740741 0.0444667217837 167% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0875420875421 0.12292977631 71% => OK
Participles: 0.0117845117845 0.0406280797675 29% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.77851067241 2.79330140395 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.023569023569 0.030933414821 76% => OK
Particles: 0.0016835016835 0.0016655270985 101% => OK
Determiners: 0.0824915824916 0.0997080785238 83% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0218855218855 0.0249443105267 88% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.013468013468 0.0148568991511 91% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3021.0 2732.02544248 111% => OK
No of words: 505.0 452.878318584 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.98217821782 6.0361032391 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.58838876751 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.340594059406 0.366273622748 93% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.267326732673 0.280924506359 95% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.190099009901 0.200843997647 95% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.126732673267 0.132149295362 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77851067241 2.79330140395 99% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 219.290929204 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516831683168 0.48968727796 106% => OK
Word variations: 61.7613671846 55.4138127331 111% => OK
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6194690265 141% => OK
Sentence length: 17.4137931034 23.380412469 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2517086896 59.4972553346 58% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.172413793 141.124799967 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4137931034 23.380412469 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.586206896552 0.674092028746 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.21349557522 134% => OK
Readability: 44.1464663708 51.4728631049 86% => OK
Elegance: 1.19135802469 1.64882698954 72% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330670680336 0.391690518653 84% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0948615935486 0.123202303941 77% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0880212258088 0.077325440228 114% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.425353408247 0.547984918172 78% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.134152505814 0.149214159877 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109467522875 0.161403998019 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0663702848472 0.0892212321368 74% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.321131655909 0.385218514788 83% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0868461277328 0.0692045440612 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227934122462 0.275328986314 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375708695784 0.0653680567796 57% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.4325221239 182% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.30420353982 113% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88274336283 82% => OK
Positive topic words: 17.0 7.22455752212 235% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 13.5995575221 162% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.