In this modern technology world everyone of us including from kids to older people, we are all addicted to the easiest life style which not good for the healthy way of doing things. I strongly, agree the point which says that children are not allow to play the computer video games for the following few reasons why I am supporting that statement.
First of all, most of the kids are nowadays wearing eye glasses at very small ages. One research article states that the reason for this problem is kids are playing video games more than six hour per day which causes more strain to the eyes and leads headache. Parents supposed to exercise restriction on hour of playing these games so that we avoid health disorders. Further, they are very inactive during the class hour, if, we are parents encourage the children in the real life games like running, soccer, cricket and basket ball that will helps in improving their health status.
Secondly, some the online video games using violent and vulgar text in message part which makes kids in going wrong path. Even though, there restriction in access these web sites still, it is not that practically implemented in the real world situation. For example, star war online video games which gives lots of sexual text that may corrupt our children in future. Some video game like word power games really helps the children to learn lots of things from internet games but they are fewer currently, If, these kinds of video games we can encourages the kids to play it.
Thirdly, over all school performs of children are reduced much since last thirty years because of kids more time encourages themselves in playing video games and not doing school home work. As a result more kids are getting only grade C and very few student getting grade A. This situations must be changed in order to make our children more productive for the nation. Above mentioned statements I got from CNN news channel interview.
Finally, because they spend more time in playing video games they are not having any kind social interaction even within family, for example one of friends son he very much interested in video games when relative comes house during that also they are not welcoming them, not even saying hi to neighbourhoods. Further, kids become more admen even the refuse to eat because they are very involved in the video games. Not only kids doing these activities even are the elder, we elder always busy in the mobile phone games.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'really', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'third', 'thirdly', 'for example', 'as a result', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.293103448276 0.229887763892 127% => OK
Verbs: 0.155172413793 0.158761421928 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0754310344828 0.0866891130778 87% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0754310344828 0.046263068375 163% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0495689655172 0.0685040099705 72% => OK
Prepositions: 0.120689655172 0.118717715034 102% => OK
Participles: 0.051724137931 0.0351676179071 147% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.23452096224 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0215517241379 0.0309702414327 70% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0797413793103 0.0887237588012 90% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00862068965517 0.0209618222197 41% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0193965517241 0.0139019557991 140% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2500.0 2387.08602151 105% => OK
No of words: 427.0 408.028673835 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.85480093677 5.86048508987 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.288056206089 0.338922669872 85% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.210772833724 0.251872472559 84% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.126463700234 0.174417080927 73% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0702576112412 0.112833075102 62% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23452096224 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550351288056 0.524397521467 105% => OK
Word variations: 64.4088070965 59.2087087015 109% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 25.1176470588 20.5533526081 122% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.7371100711 48.84282405 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.058823529 120.699889404 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1176470588 20.5533526081 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.941176470588 0.644075263715 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.54480286738 252% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 46.1949304312 45.7405998639 101% => OK
Elegance: 1.66153846154 1.45489161554 114% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23008666183 0.300154397459 77% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.10305029108 0.103427244359 100% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0745208418955 0.0752933317313 99% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.54920694093 0.497263757937 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.143589048758 0.151897553556 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0952950754283 0.114077575197 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0561099784405 0.0781384742642 72% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.320522158208 0.336927656856 95% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0665941359834 0.067059652881 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161718973994 0.210909579961 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0390806555087 0.0618886996521 63% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8870967742 50% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 8.42114695341 71% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.6433691756 95% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.