do you agree or disagree with this sentence? to achieve successful development of a country, a government should spend more money on young children’s education rather than on universities
The question is whether to achieve successful development of a country, a government should spend more money on young children’s education rather than on universities or not. In my vantage point, spending more consideration and money on elementary schools and the methods of learning of children can have more effect on society than universities. My arguments and reasons are listed below that they will strengthen my point of view:
First, it has been accepted that children have a great ability for learning; consequently if we spend a lot of money on facilities of schools, like the best libraries with the newest published books and also a high speed of internet, this opportunity will be created for children to improve their rudimentary knowledge base and subsequently they will be able to broaden their mind’s performance for creative ideas.
Second, majority of young people who enter the universities, before attending in such a place, have never faced to sophisticated learning tools, so they may confuse in related with the learning approaches, because they have obtained their information in the simplest ways during childhood. For instance, when I accepted in the university, I could not perceive my filed, because from childhood, it was not being taught to us that what goal we are looking for. We just knew that we had to study and have a job in the future, while if our teachers had spoken about the goals of studying with us or if they had used some different ways for teachings, we would have had an ample view toward our aims.
Third, when government investigates on elementary schools, at least it will be confident about growing interpersonal skills between children. It goes without saying that focusing on children’s education can have a positive impact on children’s personality, because when we regard to them as a mature person, they know themselves responsible in front of us and they are inclined to do our requests; as a result they will become to an independent person.
As I have illustrated, spending more money on children’s education not only can guarantee the future of country, but also it can change children’s behavior in the best way.
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My arguments and reasons are listed below that they will strengthen my point of view
Description: 'they' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns.
between children.
among children.
between two children.
spending more money on children’s education not only can guarantee the future of country, but also it can change children’s behavior in the best way.
Description: 'Not only...but also' is not used properly. can you re-write this sentence?
flaws:
More compound or complex sentences/clauses wanted. Try not to use pronouns like 'you, I, they, we...' as the subject of a sentence. like:
because when
we regard to them as a mature person,
they know themselves responsible in front of us and
they are inclined to do our requests; as a result
they will become to an independent person.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 361 350
No. of Characters: 1775 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.359 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.917 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.832 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 123 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 36.1 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.77 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.4 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.713 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.182 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 467, Rule ID: KNEW_NEW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'new'?
Suggestion: new
...t what goal we are looking for. We just knew that we had to study and have a job in ...
^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'consequently', 'first', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'third', 'while', 'at least', 'for instance', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.226730310263 0.229887763892 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.152744630072 0.158761421928 96% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0739856801909 0.0866891130778 85% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0286396181384 0.046263068375 62% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0883054892601 0.0685040099705 129% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.157517899761 0.118717715034 133% => OK
Participles: 0.054892601432 0.0351676179071 156% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.10160256314 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0214797136038 0.0309702414327 69% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0644391408115 0.0887237588012 73% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0310262529833 0.0209618222197 148% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0119331742243 0.0139019557991 86% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2207.0 2387.08602151 92% => OK
No of words: 361.0 408.028673835 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.1135734072 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48200974243 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.360110803324 0.338922669872 106% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.285318559557 0.251872472559 113% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.218836565097 0.174417080927 125% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.146814404432 0.112833075102 130% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10160256314 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562326869806 0.524397521467 107% => OK
Word variations: 63.1393763845 59.2087087015 107% => OK
How many sentences: 9.0 20.6684587814 44% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 40.1111111111 20.5533526081 195% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 109.087121146 48.84282405 223% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 245.222222222 120.699889404 203% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 40.1111111111 20.5533526081 195% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.66666666667 0.644075263715 259% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 68.6429670668 45.7405998639 150% => OK
Elegance: 1.62831858407 1.45489161554 112% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323527285934 0.300154397459 108% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.160109307449 0.103427244359 155% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0828641081416 0.0752933317313 110% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.69318955753 0.497263757937 139% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.198625552795 0.151897553556 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.182124824513 0.114077575197 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.183147552215 0.0781384742642 234% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.235168226609 0.336927656856 70% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.029732040131 0.067059652881 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214263315646 0.210909579961 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128360804699 0.0618886996521 207% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8870967742 50% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 8.42114695341 47% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 7.0 13.6433691756 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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