Everyone has to live on their own at some point in life. Freedom or independance is a key for someone if they want to gain or grow, in most of the cases. I would prefer to live independently from my parents as soon as posible for several reasons. I would be substantiating my views in the subsequent paragraphs. The main reasoning for my opinion is that we can get rich and wide experience if we live independently , also it can remove from us being overdependant on them consuming their funds.
Firstly, If we start living on our own as soon as possible we have a chance to get rich experience of world and it will be embedded in our system forever. If we dont live of our own sometimes parents narrow vision can make us to not fight for what we want or give up.For example , my uncle wanted to open his own restaurant at the age of 13 years . His parents didn't agree as restaurant business isn't valued much in our society. But it was my uncle's passion. What he did? He ran away from his home, started living in a nearby city. Worked at a small hotel as a waiter then gained experience slowly, now he own a chain of restaurants and well respected in our very own!! So , what I want to convey from this is parents fearing to society norms or from thier own fears can prevent young adults from trying hard.
Secondly, If we start off living on own own quickly we won't be creating over-dependance on our parents , who have already worked very hard to raise us. Let me give , my friend's example. By the time my friend wa 18 years , his parents were in thier 60s . Only source of their income was their retirement funds , which was a meagre sum. Now, does it befitt my friend to not work and rely on parents for food and his expenditure? No!!. My friend worked hard , found a job in a bank and started earning some income for his family. My point in this cae is that once we are used to living on our parents money, it will be hard to get adjusted to earning on our own and being independant.Such a person may not even be able to move out eventually.
Finally I would conclude saying that , It doesn't make much sense for adult to live with their parents for a long time as when we are fit enough to earn on our own. We will be creating unnecessary dependance on our parents by doing that, which can be detrimental to thier happiness and health eventually. Hence , its best for young adults to live on their own as soon as possible.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'as to', 'for example']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.163346613546 0.229887763892 71% => OK
Verbs: 0.181274900398 0.158761421928 114% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0876494023904 0.0866891130778 101% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0737051792829 0.046263068375 159% => OK
Pronouns: 0.125498007968 0.0685040099705 183% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.123505976096 0.118717715034 104% => OK
Participles: 0.0438247011952 0.0351676179071 125% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.51322894127 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0358565737052 0.0309702414327 116% => OK
Particles: 0.00597609561753 0.00188951952338 316% => OK
Determiners: 0.0418326693227 0.0887237588012 47% => Some determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0239043824701 0.0209618222197 114% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0139442231076 0.0139019557991 100% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2435.0 2387.08602151 102% => OK
No of words: 469.0 408.028673835 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19189765458 5.86048508987 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.238805970149 0.338922669872 70% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.153518123667 0.251872472559 61% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.091684434968 0.174417080927 53% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0618336886994 0.112833075102 55% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51322894127 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481876332623 0.524397521467 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 54.834812881 59.2087087015 93% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6684587814 116% => OK
Sentence length: 19.5416666667 20.5533526081 95% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2718938873 48.84282405 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.458333333 120.699889404 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5416666667 20.5533526081 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.625 0.644075263715 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 5.54480286738 397% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 34.8934790334 45.7405998639 76% => OK
Elegance: 0.869109947644 1.45489161554 60% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270200361853 0.300154397459 90% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0741020766203 0.103427244359 72% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0718351457833 0.0752933317313 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.401607860978 0.497263757937 81% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.173989832816 0.151897553556 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0916522204482 0.114077575197 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0971736914667 0.0781384742642 124% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.393675090544 0.336927656856 117% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0212964801663 0.067059652881 32% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207723432005 0.210909579961 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0687246052284 0.0618886996521 111% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.91756272401 142% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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