The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. This sanctuary is essential to the survival of the 300 bird species that live in our area. Although only a small percentage of the land will be sold to Smith, the proposed development will have disastrous consequences for our area. The company plans to build a small hotel on the land. Although they have promised to ensure the preservation of the sanctuary, there is no way that their plans will do anything but harm the sanctuary. There are no circumstances under which this sale will benefit our community, which relies on tourists who visits primarily to see our magnificent bird population.
There are many loopholes to the argument as it relies on many assumptions whose authenticity seems dubious.
The petition that is sent to the residents of Youngtown by an environmental protection group states that the permission should be denied to Smith Corporation to develop the land as it is now part of Youngtown Wildlife preserve which is home to several bird species. It rests on the claim that the development will have disastrous consequences for the area. But none of the consequences are stated. It also goes counter with the fact that only a small percentage of the land will be sold to Smith. If only a small portion is being sold then generally its repercussions will also be small if any i.e. it will not pose as a grave danger to the sanctuary.
The plan of the company is to build a small hotel and they have also promised the ensure the preservation of the sanctuary. If a promise has been made than how can the environmental protection group know for sure that the company's only outcome will be to harm the sanctuary? Without stating any of the consequences of this project it is hard to belive on this statement.
The Smith Corporation is going to build a small hotel, now that hotel will be aiding to the number of tourist that will visit the sanctuary rather than hampering the influx. As tourist will find a place to stay near the sanctuary it will rather help them to have a better tour of the sanctuary and that will in turn attract more tourist. So the assertion that under no cirsumstances the sale will benefit the community is really counter intuitive.
Hence due all the flaws mentioned above the claim made by the environmental protection group seems quite flawed. If more information was given regarding the harmful effects that the Smith Corporation's hotel was going to bring with proper justification then it might have been a totally different scenario. But as of now the argument seems unwarrented.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 79, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...small hotel and they have also promised the ensure the preservation of the sanctuary. If a...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...mmunity is really counter intuitive. Hence due all the flaws mentioned above the c...
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Line 9, column 114, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...al protection group seems quite flawed. If more information was given regarding th...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'hence', 'if', 'really', 'regarding', 'so', 'then', 'as to']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.231638418079 0.25644967241 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.180790960452 0.15541462614 116% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0706214689266 0.0836205057962 84% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0536723163842 0.0520304965353 103% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0310734463277 0.0272364105082 114% => OK
Prepositions: 0.118644067797 0.125424944231 95% => OK
Participles: 0.0564971751412 0.0416121511921 136% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.7895668807 2.79052419416 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0423728813559 0.026700313972 159% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.149717514124 0.113004496875 132% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0395480225989 0.0255425247493 155% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0169491525424 0.0127820249294 133% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1942.0 2731.13054187 71% => OK
No of words: 337.0 446.07635468 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.76261127596 6.12365571057 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.57801047555 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.270029673591 0.378187486979 71% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.222551928783 0.287650121315 77% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.160237388724 0.208842608468 77% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.13056379822 0.135150697306 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7895668807 2.79052419416 100% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 207.018472906 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498516320475 0.469332199767 106% => OK
Word variations: 51.5155703764 52.1807786196 99% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.039408867 80% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0625 23.2022227129 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.5394980854 57.7814097925 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.375 141.986410481 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0625 23.2022227129 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5625 0.724660767414 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.58251231527 84% => OK
Readability: 43.3176928783 51.9672348444 83% => OK
Elegance: 1.53191489362 1.8405768891 83% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.682317338448 0.441005458295 155% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.116910838683 0.135418324435 86% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0896136831673 0.0829849096947 108% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.624358243808 0.58762219726 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.17796072445 0.147661913831 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.309185516143 0.193483328276 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.14433960796 0.0970749176394 149% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.43908685491 0.42659136922 103% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.171454905118 0.0774707102158 221% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.434921436782 0.312017818177 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.189184002971 0.0698173142475 271% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.33743842365 60% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.87684729064 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.82512315271 104% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 6.46551724138 62% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.82389162562 142% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 14.657635468 75% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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