“The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. This sanctuary is essential to the survival of the 300 bird species that live in our area. Although only a small percentage of the land will be sold to Smith, the proposed development will have disastrous consequences for our area. The company plans to build a small hotel on the land. Although they have promised to ensure the preservation of the sanctuary, there is no way that their plans will do anything but harm the sanctuary. There are no circumstances under which this sale will benefit our community, which relies on tourists who visit primarily to see our magnificent bird population.”
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
the argument says the smith corportation should not be allowed to build on a small part of the land as it will have disatrous effect on the natural wildlife sactuary and there is no be benefit to the community. This argument is flawed in a couple of ways as it is based on some assumptions.
Firstly, it states they if the corporation will use a small par of the land it will have disastrous effect on the land. this is based on the assumption that without that small part of the land to be used the sepcies of beds here will not survive or maybe the hotel will be given off terrible waste or other effects that will harm the species of birds there. They need to be clear on what they mean by disastrous effect. How exactly is ahotel going to have that level of effect. In what way exactly will the birds bye affected that it is defined as dissatrous. these needs to be clearly defined.
They also state that the hotel will not benefit the land in any way. This based on the assumption that the hotel will have no positive effect on the community in general. But is community relies on tourist who come to see the magnificicient bird collection. wont a hotel there actually benefit the community. A hotel in the community means more tourist will come because they are sure there is somewhere to stay. Also theyr stourtist may like the fact that the hotel is located so close to the bird sanctuary it may give them the feeling of living in nature with the birds. So the assumption that there si no benefit of the hotel is faulty because there will be indirect benefits to the community as it will bring more tourists.
There is also the assumption that the company's plans to assuage the effect of buiding the hotel in the sanctuary will not work. They need to clearly state what the plans of the the company are and why they think it will bring nothing but harm to the community. What does the community think of as harmful to the sancuary.
Since small perentage will be sold to the company how will this have distrous effect on the beds. Have the studied the birds closely to kow how they relate with their environment. Will the birds die? The need to further explain how a small piece of land will have disastrous effects on the 300 speieces of birds.
In conclusion the argument is flawed in assuming that the companies plan to preserve the sancutuarry will not not work withour giving us reasons why hey think it will not work, and also assuming that there will be no benefit of the hotel in the community as the community is relies on tourist and a hotel there will mean more tourist will come to the community
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 483 350
No. of Characters: 2105 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.688 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.358 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.276 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 114 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.15 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.353 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.45 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.34 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.584 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.129 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
the argument says the smith corportation sh...
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Line 1, column 180, Rule ID: NOW[3]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
... natural wildlife sactuary and there is no be benefit to the community. This argum...
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Line 5, column 121, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...ill have disastrous effect on the land. this is based on the assumption that without...
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Line 5, column 561, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: These
...ected that it is defined as dissatrous. these needs to be clearly defined. They ...
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Line 9, column 259, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Wont
...see the magnificicient bird collection. wont a hotel there actually benefit the comm...
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Line 9, column 414, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ey are sure there is somewhere to stay. Also theyr stourtist may like the fact that ...
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Line 13, column 174, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...need to clearly state what the plans of the the company are and why they think it will ...
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Line 13, column 174, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...need to clearly state what the plans of the the company are and why they think it will ...
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Line 17, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nk of as harmful to the sancuary. Since small perentage will be sold to the com...
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Line 17, column 286, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... of land will have disastrous effects on the 300 speieces of birds. In concl...
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Line 21, column 107, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: not
...s plan to preserve the sancutuarry will not not work withour giving us reasons why hey ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, if, may, so, in conclusion, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 29.0 12.9520958084 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2161.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 483.0 441.139720559 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47412008282 5.12650576532 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33191191611 2.78398813304 84% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.370600414079 0.468620217663 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 672.3 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.5514171453 57.8364921388 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.9565217391 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.26086956522 5.70786347227 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121239344308 0.218282227539 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0457687256316 0.0743258471296 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476199791491 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0808020554163 0.128457276422 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0602507967519 0.0628817314937 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.3799401198 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 48.3550499002 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.65 12.5979740519 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.9 8.32208582834 83% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 98.500998004 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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