TPO 39 - Independent taskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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TPO 39 - Independent task

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by apply2017 on Thu, 12/08/2016 - 16:22

It is very crucial to know if you are going to successid in your future job or not, because you are going to spend many of valuable years of your age to work and explore a specific job, so you have to know what type of job fits you. some people think that in past, it was easier to identify what type of job would secure your future success. In my point of view, people are able to be familier with jobs better nowdays than past for few reasons.

First, internet has made a massive data source for us. People can simply search about a particular job on internet and download many information about the job, while people in past did not have access to internet. For example, if you would like to know what skills a computer expert should have or how much salary you recieve, with one click you can search it on google, even obtain answeres of questions that you did not ask.

Second, people that have experience in a job can be found everywhere. due to increase of population, most of jobs have been tried out by some people , so you can always find someone that has experince in your intended field, while people in past lived in small groups, and most of them had experience in small number of fields of work.

Finally, people are educating in universities to become proffesional in jobs that current world needs. Thanks to school and universities, people can study different subjects to indicate their favourite field of study based on their majors before choosing a career, while people in past did not study academically, so their choice was more based on luck rather than wisdom or knowledge.

Basically, I think people are able to identify their future job easier because internet is always online to answer our questions and education system is there to teach us about future outcomes and due to large number of people you can always ask someone that is experienced more tha you.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 234, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
...have to know what type of job fits you. some people think that in past, it was easie...
^^^^
Line 1, column 257, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
...of job fits you. some people think that in past, it was easier to identify what type of...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 129, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...particular job on internet and download many information about the job, while people...
^^^^
Line 3, column 129, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much information', 'a good deal of information'.
Suggestion: much information; a good deal of information
...particular job on internet and download many information about the job, while people in past did...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 71, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Due
...ience in a job can be found everywhere. due to increase of population, most of jobs...
^^^
Line 5, column 102, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the jobs') or simply say ''most jobs''.
Suggestion: most of the jobs; most jobs
...rywhere. due to increase of population, most of jobs have been tried out by some people , so...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 149, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... jobs have been tried out by some people , so you can always find someone that has...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, second, so, while, for example, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1562.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 338.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62130177515 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3597787588 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514792899408 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences, or put a space between two sentences.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => OK
Sentence length SD: 84.0041321298 48.9658058833 172% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.0 100.406767564 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.7272727273 20.6045352989 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36363636364 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219753660242 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0974445112294 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0840988273463 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128052300685 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.086509734917 0.0645574589148 134% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.11 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

you are going to successid
you are going to succeed

people that have experience in a job
people who have experience in a job

find someone that has experince
find someone who has experience

Sentence: It is very crucial to know if you are going to successid in your future job or not, because you are going to spend many of valuable years of your age to work and explore a specific job, so you have to know what type of job fits you. some people think that in past, it was easier to identify what type of job would secure your future success.
Error: successid Suggestion: succeed

Sentence: In my point of view, people are able to be familier with jobs better nowdays than past for few reasons.
Error: nowdays Suggestion: nowadays
Error: familier Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: For example, if you would like to know what skills a computer expert should have or how much salary you recieve, with one click you can search it on google, even obtain answeres of questions that you did not ask.
Error: recieve Suggestion: receive
Error: answeres Suggestion: answered

Sentence: Second, people that have experience in a job can be found everywhere. due to increase of population, most of jobs have been tried out by some people , so you can always find someone that has experince in your intended field, while people in past lived in small groups, and most of them had experience in small number of fields of work.
Error: experince Suggestion: experience

Sentence: Finally, people are educating in universities to become proffesional in jobs that current world needs.
Error: proffesional Suggestion: professional

Sentence: Thanks to school and universities, people can study different subjects to indicate their favourite field of study based on their majors before choosing a career, while people in past did not study academically, so their choice was more based on luck rather than wisdom or knowledge.
Error: favourite Suggestion: favorite

Sentence: Basically, I think people are able to identify their future job easier because internet is always online to answer our questions and education system is there to teach us about future outcomes and due to large number of people you can always ask someone that is experienced more tha you.
Error: tha Suggestion: than

flaws:
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2

More sentence varieties wanted. most of sentences start with the subject 'people' or 'you'

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 338 350
No. of Characters: 1514 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.288 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.479 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.28 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 104 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 53 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 39 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 37.556 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.602 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.889 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.433 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.723 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.172 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5