It is true that the youngsters in this generation like to spend time in shopping malls instead of participating in sports and musical groups. I think this is completely a negative trend due to the reasons listed in the following paragraphs.
First of all, by engaging sports or arts help the youngsters to stay healthy physically and mentally. The sports activities make a person physically strong, while the art and music are the motivation for the mind. For instance, the students who are playing some sports have a healthy physique than the other students, who like to roam in the shopping malls. The study conducted by WHO recently says that the youngsters do not indulge in any sports and arts are more likely to affect by the psychological disorder depression. Thus, music and sports make the youngsters healthy.
Another important reason is organized group activities like sports or music improve the creativity in young people. Thus they became fruitful citizens for their society as musicians and sport stars. However, the young generation who enjoy roaming in the shopping malls has nothing productive to do for their societies. Instead, gradually they turn as a burden for the community by engaging criminal in the criminal activities. For instance, the group of youngsters gang in shopping malls and other public places is the kingpin of criminal activities in that local area, Hence, the arts and sports make youngsters to staying focused on their lives.
To conclude, I strongly believe sports and art forms make the youngsters healthy physically and mentally and it also enhance the creativity in young people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, so, thus, while, for instance, i think, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1369.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14661654135 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71881456262 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 176.041082164 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507518796992 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 407.7 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6823457342 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.307692308 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4615384615 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15384615385 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180124024829 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0757848952007 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0438294332323 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121134447282 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579674900033 0.056905535591 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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