tpo integrated 25

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tpo integrated 25

Submitted by mariem on Fri, 08/11/2017 - 17:23

The lecture and the reading both discuss the discovery of copper vessels. While the reading states that the copper vessels are not used to conduct electricity, and enumerates three reasons of support, the lecture refutes. It claims that the reasons mentioned in the reading are not convincing.

First of all, the reading argues that if the batteries were used to conduct electricity, there should be metals wires found near the area of discovery. But, there is no evidence of any wires. Yet, the lecture refutes this point by saying that the vessels were found by local people. They were not trained well to reserve or recognize any other materials found near the vessels. May be they found the wires but they thought that they are not important.

In addition, the reading states that the copper vessels look exactly like the copper used for holding the scrolls. The fact that there were no scrolls found, means that the scrolls disintegrate by time. But, the lecture counter this point saying that in the beginning the copper vessels was used to preserve the scrolls, however by adding iron and liquid to the vessels they could conduct electricity. The copper vessels uses were adapted to another purpose.

Lastly, the reading passage makes the argument that ancient people were not relied on electricity on any of their devices. But, the lecture opposes this point by saying that the copper vessels were doing some mild or tingling sensation, so people use them as a magical power. Furthermore, copper vessels were used to heal pain and relive ach. Some ancient doctor were using them for that purpose.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 379, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: Maybe
...other materials found near the vessels. May be they found the wires but they thought t...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 453, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ey thought that they are not important. In addition, the reading states that the...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, lastly, look, may, so, well, while, in addition, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1354.0 1373.03311258 99% => OK
No of words: 270.0 270.72406181 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01481481481 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30522755364 2.5805825403 89% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481481481481 0.540411800872 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 410.4 419.366225166 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.874635567 49.2860985944 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.625 110.228320801 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.875 21.698381199 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1875 7.06452816374 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.414565298306 0.272083759551 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152549871068 0.0996497079465 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0671776381057 0.0662205650399 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260674595393 0.162205337803 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103025480466 0.0443174109184 232% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.3589403974 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 53.8541721854 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.0289183223 76% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.42419426049 92% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 63.6247240618 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.7273730684 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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