there are many different types of music in the world today. why do we need music? is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

There is a wide range of music genres which nowadays people listen to and this shows our need to music and its effects on our life. I, for one, think music is another way of communication. Investigating the contribution of music to our attitude towards life shows this.
Cheerful people are believed to hear happy and up-beat songs. So, it is plausible to say we can guess some personality traits of every person by paying attention to what kind of music they listen to. There are also some songs to which we can really communicate, a feeling like the song tells our story and it gives us a fairly good feeling that we know someone understand us. These days, also there are music therapy by which many mental diseases would be cured.
There are two main genres of music: international and traditional. International music is said to be more popular amongst younger majority. And as for the importance, as mentioned earlier, traditional music can also give some clues about the personality of a nation. So it would be acceptable to say that traditional music of a country is more important and should be paid attention equally with the international one.
All in all, music is a very important aspect of today’s world which is a huge industry. It would be really essential to devote our attention to what we listen because it absolutely affects our way of thinking. and also, traditional music as an emblem of a culture of a country should be tried to improve.

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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 362, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'understands'.
Suggestion: understands
...airly good feeling that we know someone understand us. These days, also there are music th...
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Line 2, column 410, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'therapies'?
Suggestion: therapies
...nd us. These days, also there are music therapy by which many mental diseases would be ...
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Line 4, column 216, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...absolutely affects our way of thinking. and also, traditional music as an emblem of...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... a country should be tried to improve.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, so, as for, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1218.0 1615.20841683 75% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7578125 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78009763697 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 176.041082164 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54296875 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 396.9 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.4576493575 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2857142857 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 7.06120827912 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.382397224025 0.244688304435 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146941025032 0.084324248473 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775434454258 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241873311208 0.151304729494 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0743545398463 0.056905535591 131% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.0946893788 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 78.4519038076 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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