The bar chart shows the participation of children in selected leisure activities in Australia.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph gives and information about how many people aged 5 to 14 take part in 5 different activities in Australia.
It can be seen that boys participate more than girls do. But only one exception is art and craft, in that 3 of 5 girls spend their time free time compared to 2 of 5 boys.
By far the most common entertainment for all girls and boys is watching television and videos, while skateboarding and rollerblading is least popular, is only over 40 and 30 percent respectively. Moreover, the computer game is closely followed by television in popularity among children ( 80 of boys and 60 percent of girls).
The same proportion of girls take part in riding a bicycle and this is 10 percent less than a percentage of boys.
To conclude, a general trend is that boys’ participation in activities more than girls’, even in a few event their involvement is dominant or equal.
- Retirement age of people 56
- Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular.Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own kn 61
- Retirement 56
- Retirement age 56
- The bar chart shows the participation of children in selected leisure activities in Australia.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 11
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 287, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... television in popularity among children 80 of boys and 60 percent of girls. Th...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...percent less than a percentage of boys. To conclude, a general trend is that boy...
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Line 7, column 110, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun event seems to be countable; consider using: 'few events'.
Suggestion: few events
...vities more than girls', even in a few event their involvement is dominant or equal....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 740.0 965.302439024 77% => OK
No of words: 156.0 196.424390244 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74358974359 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53411884305 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03681119305 2.65546596893 114% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.634615384615 0.547539520022 116% => OK
syllable_count: 226.8 283.868780488 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8599589379 43.030603864 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.714285714 112.824112599 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2857142857 22.9334400587 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42857142857 5.23603664747 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0637836285972 0.215688989381 30% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.031116232656 0.103423049105 30% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.033275549337 0.0843802449381 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0376296205441 0.15604864568 24% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0341499698874 0.0819641961636 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 61.2550243902 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 11.4140731707 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.4329268293 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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