The writer of this analytical piece has drawn a faulty conclusion of not allowing the West Lansburg council to built a road by giving the analogy of neighboring Eastern Carpenteria past. Also, the result is based on incomplete and unverified data.
Firstly, the author hasn't been sure about the statistical data. Although, wildlife sanctuary are build to preserve and enhance the wildlife protected under it, the reason for the diminishing of the tufted groundhog could be something else like the environmental or climatic change. In that case, the sanctuary build is completely useless and is justing wasting the land space where different useful activity can take place. So, it isn't necessary that human indulgence always leads to the decline of the wildlife.
Secondly, the author makes an analogy that West Lansburg will serve the same fate as that of Eastern Carpenteria. A thing true for one object doesn't need to be true for the other also. Author's analogy is similar of saying bananas and telephones are both shaped to fit our face and hence banana can be used as telephone. The development of road might lead to the sea otter's population to decline however it isn't compulsory to be true for tufted groudhog. No appropriate facts has been provided showing the correlation between the two habitats. Moreover, if a road is developed around the habitat it may be served as a tourist route hence, increasing the tourism market of West Lansburg.
Finally, each and every wildlife has had a different way of living life. There have been animals like the dogs and the cats who have loved the human company since the inception. The life rate of such habitats have been proliferating in the presence of humans. By the building of the road alond the edge of the wetlands, will surely increase the human indulgence with tufted groundhog which could be beneficial and in consequence enhancing the popluation, life style of that of the habitat.
Thus, the author has done a huge mistake of theorizing before he/she has proper, trusted data. Inevitably, one tries in these circumstance to twist fact to suit theories instead of theory to suit facts. Also, no correlation between the habitat of Eastern Carpenteria i.e. sea otter and that of tufted groundhog has beem shown. Thus. assuming of them serving the same fate is inappropriate. If the author had given the weightage detailes mentioned above the conclusion of not developing the road might have been justified.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2067.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 410.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04146341463 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69099562723 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 204.123752495 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558536585366 0.468620217663 119% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.3915996651 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.4285714286 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5238095238 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38095238095 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0335668549678 0.218282227539 15% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00921588901684 0.0743258471296 12% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0160706552634 0.0701772020484 23% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0172094640351 0.128457276422 13% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0148443147296 0.0628817314937 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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