I agree with the statement that people benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries. I am inclined to believe that it is the matter of nationality. There are two reasons and examples to support my opinion.
First of all, from my subject’s perspective, when people are traveling in their own country, they can learn more about their nationality and culture than traveling to foreign countries. For example, in my country, Brazil, it has an extensive area and twenty-six states. It is much culture, culinary, some accents costumes and other diverse things. I believe that there’s a wide and open knowledge in there and the whole diverse culture and its practice present in different regions and places. However, the cost to explore the country by air travel, sometimes it can be more expensive to afford than plan a travel to another country. This is a negative contribution for those who haven’t been benefited from a good income in general.
In the second place, from my point of view, people benefit themselves and their country itself. In what way? Helping the nation’s economy for example. Visiting other states, we can purchase handcrafts and give them as gifts for those we like and love, book and be a host in nice hotels, enjoy local restaurants, go to parks, and many other things. All those mentioned actions can help the country economically and socially, including in crisis’ times. In another good example, it is seen that American people frequently travel through their state. I believe that this is one of the contributions that make the United States powerful cultural country. That’s why people from around the world seek travels to explore it.
In conclusion, there are my reasons to support my opinion about the statement “people benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries”.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, for example, in conclusion, in general, first of all, in the second place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1625.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 313.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19169329073 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86089347763 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536741214058 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.908310993 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.2777777778 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3888888889 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11111111111 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366374585914 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119062123954 0.076458572812 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.166711108262 0.0737576698707 226% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.325309990968 0.150856017488 216% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.155632015015 0.0645574589148 241% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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