Your town council is thinking about banning the use of mobile phones on public transport and in shops and restaurants.
Write a letter to the town council giving your opinion about this and why you think it is or is not a good idea.
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing regarding the recent debates over the use of mobile devices in publicity, such as on public transport, in shops or restaurants. The idea proves to have certain implications to both professional and personal lives of the citizens and is undoubtedly a double-edged sword.
On the one hand, such restrictions could enhance the quality of life in the city generally as people would not get disturbed by constant notifications and phone calls. Thus, instead of being irritated by noise, which may lead to headaches and result in the downturn in efficiency at workplaces, people are likely to have some extra rest on their way to work. The lines in the shops might end to be an issue because people would not get distracted at the cashier's. After all, people finally would learn to spend family time together mindfully and not stare at their phones or cause inconvenience to other people there due to loud talks on the phone or catchy tunes that are difficult to get rid of later.
On the other hand, such a ban could result in failed job interviews, bankruptcies or even deaths. Cannot a person answer a call of a relative who has had a stroke, the latter might face unpleasant consequences and some of them can turn out to be irreversible. What I am leading to is that in case of emergency people must have access to their cell phones to ensure their financial, personal or professional life is secure otherwise it is nothing but a gross violation of human rights.
When it comes to my opinion, I truly believe that citizens could benefit from certain limitations on the use of mobiles phones in public places. Yet, those limitations should by no means violate human rights and be chosen carefully to make sure the changes are done for the better. Another point to consider is how to prevent people from abusing the right to use phones in case such restrictions are imposed.
Yours,
Nancy Adams
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- Your town council is thinking about banning the use of mobile phones on public transport and in shops and restaurants Write a letter to the town council giving your opinion about this and why you think it is or is not a good idea
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing regarding the recent debate...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...such restrictions are imposed. Yours, Nancy Adams
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, may, regarding, so, thus, after all, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 43.0788530466 35% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1601.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 336.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76488095238 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70085801171 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583333333333 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.1926216074 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.153846154 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8461538462 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23076923077 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0908487558601 0.236089414692 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.033000973596 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0410333808084 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0636032577467 0.150856017488 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403408426493 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.6 Out of 6.0
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