An ailing patient should have easy access to his or her doctor’s record of treating similarly afflicted patients. Through gaining such access, the ailing patient may better determine whether the doctor is competent to treat that medical condition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The human body is a complex structure full of its intricacies and nuances and ailments on the other hand too are extremely varied in form and how they effect the human body. Thus the suitability of a doctor to treat a particular patient is a very subjective matter, generally without a single correct answer. While, on the surface, providing ailing patients with the doctor's record of treating patients may seem beneficial in selecting the right doctor, the recommendation, in most cases, does not stand deeper scrutiny and falls flat.
There are a plethora of practical problems with implementation of the recommendation as well. It would require the ailing patient to understand nuanced medical terms and their implications in the records of the doctor to analysis the effectiveness of the doctor. This not a practical assumption as most people do not know in depth about medical sciences and would not be able to gain much insight, from an improper analysis of medical records, into the efficacy of the doctor.
In addition to the lack of understanding of medical terminology and situations, another implementation problem would be that of time. The understanding and scrutiny of medical records by the patient will not only require a lot of time but also a lot of effort from the patient. In most cases this is not possible as the patient needs to be acted upon at the earliest or may not have mental faculty needed to give enough though to make this decision after due deliberation. It could even cause adverse effect on the health of the patient in time wasted in the understanding of records or extra stress put on the patient.
It can be argued that the patient's family members get this access and right in cases where the patient is incapable to do the same, but this still requires time and does not guarantee that the family members will have enough knowledge to be able to judge the details of medical cases and understand which doctor did a better job. The recommendation fails to address its main concerns here and is far from advantageous.
One could be in favour of providing the family and the patient with blanket statistics about the doctors, which would help them get a decent idea and positive mindset. Though a positive mindset could help go a long way, these overall statistics could also cause a false sense of security as in many cases the doctor may be effective for a particular kind of disease but not for special complications that the patient may have. Thus extreme caution must be taken while referring to medical data while making choice of a doctor.
Thus it can be concluded that giving the patients access to medical records cases treated by a doctor is not only against the right to privacy of the doctor and their patients but also practically cumbersome. This step could also inadvertently cause more negative effects than helping patients.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 492 350
No. of Characters: 2355 1500
No. of Different Words: 227 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.71 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.787 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.695 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 125 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.941 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.124 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.333 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.618 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.109 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 175, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...orm and how they effect the human body. Thus the suitability of a doctor to treat a ...
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Line 7, column 27, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'patients'' or 'patient's'?
Suggestion: patients'; patient's
...e patient. It can be argued that the patients family members get this access and righ...
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Line 9, column 428, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...omplications that the patient may have. Thus extreme caution must be taken while ref...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ata while making choice of a doctor. Thus it can be concluded that giving the pat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, may, so, still, thus, well, while, in addition, kind of, in many cases, in most cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 11.1786427146 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2402.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 492.0 441.139720559 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88211382114 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73921912881 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471544715447 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 754.2 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.652060258 57.8364921388 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.294117647 119.503703932 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9411764706 23.324526521 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76470588235 5.70786347227 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326505328161 0.218282227539 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110998873292 0.0743258471296 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0979940399479 0.0701772020484 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186649110414 0.128457276422 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0462284112223 0.0628817314937 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.3550499002 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.62 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 98.500998004 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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