While it may be true that Video rental store at downtown significantly decreased its operating expenses by closing at 6.00 pm rather than 9.00 pm and reducing the stock by eliminating all movies released more than 5 years ago. This author argument doesn't make cogent case for the increase in the profit of that video store because of the above change. In some sense it can inferred but this argument is rife with holes and assumptions.
Primarily the video store at downtown is not same as the other video stores situated at different location. For example people's mindset who comes to downtown store might differ from the people who visits the store in rural area. Author has mentioned that they reduced the operating cost by eliminating the movies which were released 5 years ago. It can be the case that downtown people are disinclined towards older movies and they like to watch the latest movies , or they want the genre of Action, while the rural people may like the old movies, Comedy centric movies. In this case if older movies re eliminated then people would not visit the store which indeed leads to decline in profit.
Additionally, author states that they have decreased the operational expenses by closing at 6.00 pm instead of 9.00 pm. It can very well happen that very less people used to visit the store after 6 pm at the downtown, therefore it has reduced the operational expense. However, if in another store
many people visit the store after 6.00 pm, then closing the store by 6pm might impact significantly to the profit of the Video store. So, the author should do survey in all the store and get the information during which time the people often visit store. Timings might differ from one store to another,
based on survey of each store, decision can be made when the particular video store can be closed.
Building upon the many unwarranted information, author suggest that by following the above changes the downtown store has increased the profit by reducing the operating expenses. But there is no evidence that cause of this change only the video store has increased the profit. For example, it can very well happen that many people would have been visited the store due to release of a new movie where everyone were eagerly waiting to watch it. Author should be substantiating his argument that store had made more profit by more evidence.
Examining all the various angles and factore involved in increasing the store profit, argument lacks many evidence to support its argument.The author should provide more information regarding how the downtown store made profit and how the same implication holds good for all other
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Examining all the various angles and factore involved in increasing the store profit, argument lacks many evidence to support its argument.The author should provide more information regarding how the downtown store made profit and how the same implication holds good for all other
Error: factore Suggestion: factor
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- duplicated to argument 1
argument 3 -- not OK. it is like a conclusion paragraph
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 454 350
No. of Characters: 2165 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.616 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.769 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.349 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 146 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.222 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.324 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.388 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.579 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.124 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 249, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... than 5 years ago. This author argument doesnt make cogent case for the increase in th...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 374, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'infer'
Suggestion: infer
... the above change. In some sense it can inferred but this argument is rife with holes an...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 333, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...iminating the movies which were released 5 years ago. It can be the case that dow...
^^
Line 3, column 465, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...and they like to watch the latest movies , or they want the genre of Action, while...
^^
Line 5, column 155, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...0 pm. It can very well happen that very less people used to visit the store after 6 ...
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Line 9, column 19, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much unwarranted information', 'a good deal of unwarranted information'.
Suggestion: much unwarranted information; a good deal of unwarranted information
...ore can be closed. Building upon the many unwarranted information, author suggest that by following the a...
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Line 11, column 102, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun evidence seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much evidence', 'a good deal of evidence'.
Suggestion: much evidence; a good deal of evidence
...easing the store profit, argument lacks many evidence to support its argument.The author shou...
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Line 11, column 140, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...s many evidence to support its argument.The author should provide more information ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, regarding, so, then, therefore, well, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2217.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 452.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90486725664 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41371322441 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46017699115 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 701.1 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.9790867312 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.166666667 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1111111111 23.324526521 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38888888889 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0856930283203 0.218282227539 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0383058657275 0.0743258471296 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0271983378928 0.0701772020484 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0522394871274 0.128457276422 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0367565109565 0.0628817314937 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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