“The autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders; if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country cannot be checked, both its economy and national identity are endangered. Because illegal immigrants pose such threats, every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin.”
While it is advisable for every country to be wary of intruders, the authors implications from the restraining illegal immigrant to a country being autonomous is very vague.The argument is not cogent enough to believe that making efforts to send back illegal immigrants can make that particular country autonomous. This particular conclusion is being made on number of unsubstantiated assumptions the author made.
Firstly, country being autonomous has many factors, as in, the potential imports and exports , living standards of people, ability of government to stabilise and improve the economy and many others. This has nothing to do with strength of its borders.The possible interpretations of strength of borders could be, power of the army,border patrol strength and the technological advancements like cc cameras and intruder detection algorithms used by the country. None of these have a direct relation to the autonomous nature of the country as well. The author could benefit from being more specific about, the strength of borders and its direct or indirect relation to autonomous nature of country. Author could even strengthen this, by giving an example where the country is autonomous due to its borders strength.
In addition, author is making a direct correlation between preventing the illegal immigrants from entering the country and it’s economy and identity. The author is making the same mistake as pointed out in above paragraph. The economy depends on numerous factors such as, imports and exports, natural and human resources, social organisation, political freedom and many more. National identity depends on the deed the country carries out, the kind of ethics they follow , the way they project themselves – take the case of Bhutan, it projects itself as a carbon negative country and it measures the national GDP in terms of the happiness of their citizens. Author could benefit from ,linking the illegal immigrants to national identity and economy with more evidence as in, giving some direct negative effects of allowing illegal immigrants on economy or positive effects of checking illegal immigrants on national identity.
Building upon the implication, that the illegal immigrants pose threat to the national identity and economy, author makes another statement as, to send back the illegal immigrants to their own country. As this is a conclusion drawn from a fallacious assumption, from first order logic, this statement is also a false one. One can observe that, author is inconsistent in his statements , initially he talked about country being autonomous and then went into another direction of national identity. Author could stick to one point and explain the same in more detail instead of expressing many possible effects of illegal immigrants.
In conclusion, Country has to strengthen its people ,economy, ethics to become autonomous.While stopping the illegal immigrants can make the people of the country feel more safer and work or move freely in the country, which in turn may lead to a better economy, but just stopping illegal immigrants can’t make a country autonomous. However, this author’s argument is not significantly persuasive to take strong measures to stop any illegal immigrants.
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- “The autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders; if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country cannot be checked, both its economy and national identity are endangered. Because illegal immigrants pose such threats, every ef 54
- “The autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders; if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country cannot be checked, both its economy and national identity are endangered. Because illegal immigrants pose such threats, every ef 50
- The real talent of a popular musician cannot accurately be assessed until the musician has been dead for several generations, so that his or her fame does not interfere with honest assessment. 50
- The first step to self-knowledge is rejection of the familiar. 79
- The first step to self-knowledge is rejection of the familiar. 87
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... country being autonomous is very vague.The argument is not cogent enough to believ...
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Suggestion: ,
...as in, the potential imports and exports , living standards of people, ability of ...
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...hing to do with strength of its borders.The possible interpretations of strength of...
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Suggestion: , border
...h of borders could be, power of the army,border patrol strength and the technological a...
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...ries out, the kind of ethics they follow , the way they project themselves – take ...
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...heir citizens. Author could benefit from ,linking the illegal immigrants to nation...
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...author is inconsistent in his statements , initially he talked about country being...
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...on, Country has to strengthen its people ,economy, ethics to become autonomous.Whi...
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...e ,economy, ethics to become autonomous.While stopping the illegal immigrants can mak...
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Line 9, column 169, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'safer' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: safer
...can make the people of the country feel more safer and work or move freely in the country,...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'while', 'as to', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'kind of', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.260945709282 0.25644967241 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.134851138354 0.15541462614 87% => OK
Adjectives: 0.129597197898 0.0836205057962 155% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0297723292469 0.0520304965353 57% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0280210157618 0.0272364105082 103% => OK
Prepositions: 0.112084063047 0.125424944231 89% => OK
Participles: 0.0402802101576 0.0416121511921 97% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.91386271548 2.79052419416 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0332749562172 0.026700313972 125% => OK
Particles: 0.00525394045534 0.001811407834 290% => OK
Determiners: 0.103327495622 0.113004496875 91% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0175131348511 0.0255425247493 69% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00350262697023 0.0127820249294 27% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3265.0 2731.13054187 120% => OK
No of words: 510.0 446.07635468 114% => OK
Chars per words: 6.40196078431 6.12365571057 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.57801047555 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.454901960784 0.378187486979 120% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.372549019608 0.287650121315 130% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.241176470588 0.208842608468 115% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.149019607843 0.135150697306 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91386271548 2.79052419416 104% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 207.018472906 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476470588235 0.469332199767 102% => OK
Word variations: 55.4874066004 52.1807786196 106% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.039408867 90% => OK
Sentence length: 28.3333333333 23.2022227129 122% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.4152448015 57.7814097925 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 181.388888889 141.986410481 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3333333333 23.2022227129 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.888888888889 0.724660767414 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 3.58251231527 279% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 65.5882352941 51.9672348444 126% => OK
Elegance: 2.14545454545 1.8405768891 117% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.535282338464 0.441005458295 121% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.167363197054 0.135418324435 124% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0985747141839 0.0829849096947 119% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.603543623693 0.58762219726 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.157925339899 0.147661913831 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.234800873577 0.193483328276 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0983481695792 0.0970749176394 101% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.447573019479 0.42659136922 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0566688682083 0.0774707102158 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.365957202651 0.312017818177 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0632941141177 0.0698173142475 91% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.33743842365 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.87684729064 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.82512315271 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 6.46551724138 46% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 5.36822660099 149% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 14.657635468 89% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.