The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles. Their responses to a recent survey show that in their eating habits they conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago. Furthermore, there has been a fourfold increase in sales of food products containing kiran, a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol. This trend is also evident in reduced sales of sulia, a food that few of the healthiest citizens regularly eat.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument says that due to the government's nutritional recommendations and fluctuation in sales of some products, the citizens of Forsythe have adopted a more healthful lifestyle. Stated in this way, the argument fails to take many pivotal factors into consideration for which no transparent evidence is provided. Therefore, the argument remains fallacious and open for debate. Nevertheless, in order to make it more compelling, the following three implications must be provided.
First of all, the author assumed that the survey conducted to determine how the citizens achieve a healthier lifestyle is tenable. But, it fails to answer several questions that how many people participated in that survey, what type of questions were asked, or whether the participants even were honest in the survey. So, without knowing the answers to these questions, it is hard to accept the conclusion the author made.
Furthermore, another assumption is that the nutritional recommendation given by the government is actually the cause of their healthful living. However, the author did not mention what the suggestions were. Moreover, why did not they follow these suggestions ten years ago? What really happened that they started these instructions now? No clear explanations are provided.
Finally, an increase in sales of products containing kiran and a decline in sales of sulia is the indication of the healthy lifestyle Forsythe people are living now. Reduction of cholesterol, as people are eager to purchase food products with kiran, is a sign of healthy life; a healthy lifestyle is not only dependent upon the reduction of cholesterol, but on other factors: mental health, less depression, and less stress. In addition, the author fails to mention why the healthiest citizens refuse to sulia. The healthiest people ignore buying sulia does not indicate that this food is detrimental to health. Perhaps, sulia is more expensive, that is why people really do not feel interested to purchase it. If this is the case, the conclusion is weakened.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is to offer more evidence (perhaps in the form of a systematic research study), it will be possible to fully assess and bolster the conclusion.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 370 350
No. of Characters: 1902 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.386 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.141 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.937 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.941 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.272 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.52 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.056 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, really, so, therefore, in addition, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.9520958084 15% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1967.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 370.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31621621622 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02039451948 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545945945946 0.468620217663 117% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.2470966965 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.35 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 5.70786347227 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211566507462 0.218282227539 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0554560871879 0.0743258471296 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700817357404 0.0701772020484 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102886257428 0.128457276422 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0691661152621 0.0628817314937 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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