Essay topics: The following is a memorandum from the office of Mayor Harrison Smith Jones.
"In order to relieve Briggsville’s notorious traffic congestion, Mayor Harrison Smith Jones plans to build a multi-million dollar subway system. The subway will run through the major downtown areas, a part of the town where buses serve as the only form of public transportation. For years, residents have been complaining both about inconsistent buses, and the general lack of safety while riding the buses. Additionally, the subway will be running twenty-four hours a day. Since motorists will spend less time in traffic, Mayor Harrison Smith Jones expects to see an immediate increase in worker productivity, which will improve the economy of Briggsville."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
Mayor Harrison Smith Jones' proposal for the new subway system is flawed for many reasons. The memorandum fails to discuss specific details that are crucial to this plan being as successful as he hopes.
First, the argument fails to address the location of the "notorious traffic congestion" in the city. His proposal assumes that this sleek, new subway will solve all the traffic issues without clarifying where the traffic is the worst. Is traffic an issue downtown? Entering the city? Leaving the city? Without this information, the subway system will be less successful if it fails to reduce traffic where it is the worst. The Mayor should evaluate and elaborate on traffic conditions further to create a more effective plan.
In addition, the argument makes a weak link between less traffic leading to more productivity in the workplace as a whole. This is a lofty assumption. The workers decline in productivity could be the result of a variety of factors. Perhaps the low economy mentioned is dampening the spirits in Briggsville, or workers are becoming unsatisfied with their place of employment. Along with this, the plan does not specify which occupations are facing a decline in output. Are businesses suffering from lowering rates in the areas where there is traffic? Is this an isolated incident or just local to one area of town? To strengthen the argument, the Mayor needs to determine the cause of decreased productivity and the location of businesses with decreased productivity, then suggest an adequate solution.
Finally, the argument makes the vague correlation that an immediate increase in productivity will improve the economy in Briggsville. Mayor Harrison Jones-Smith fails to take into account the various reasons for a low economy. Is the economy as a whole struggling? If this is the case, the subway system will do little to improve a national economic decline. Similarly, the major argues that this subway system will immediately increase worker productivity, and in turn improve the economy. Immediately is a powerful word in terms of the economy. Very rarely does a workplace dynamic shift overnight; economies do not dramatically improve immediately either. To strengthen this proposal, the state of the current national economy must be taken into account. Ultimately, this proposal is one that has the potential to be an effective plan of action. However, it desperately needs more clarification and detail to achieve what the Mayor desires.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 398 350
No. of Characters: 2031 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.467 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.103 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.76 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 131 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.741 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.91 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.296 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.256 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.417 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.081 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, may, similarly, so, then, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2104.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 398.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2864321608 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93173770701 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494974874372 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 674.1 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.8473053892 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.3961861053 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.9259259259 119.503703932 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7407407407 23.324526521 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.44444444444 5.70786347227 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190791141479 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0480094467356 0.0743258471296 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616705630198 0.0701772020484 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136685645965 0.128457276422 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0671798673609 0.0628817314937 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 48.3550499002 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.81 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 98.500998004 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 12.3882235529 44% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.1389221557 68% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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