Fifteen years ago Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors Since that time Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes and overall student

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Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

The argument states that 15 years ago, a procedure was implemented to evaluate the teaching effectiveness and in response to it, teachers started assigning higher grades to students. Employers observed the rise in grades was significant and they deduce that this may not be the student real achievement, and this resulted into students did not get good jobs and they were not successful as job graduates. However, there are many splits in this line of reasoning.

Firstly, there is no evidence to show that the evaluation procedure was implemented. It is not evident that how many students did take the evaluation procedure seriously? An if this was implemented so was it effective? Did the university really come to know about how efficient their teachers are? The argument does not provide any explanations to the above questions clearly.

Secondly, it has mentioned that teachers started assigning higher grades but there is no figure provided to check that how higher did the teachers assign grades? Was the increment in grades significant? It is not evident that how many students got higher grades. There was an overall student grades average in the Omega University have risen by 30 percent, but no figure is provided to support that 30 percent increment was compared to previous year or any other year. Apparently, how many professors did assign higher grades is also not mentioned.

Thirdly, the argument states that employers look at the dramatic rise in grades and inferred that this may not reflect student accurate achievement but no figure is provided to prove that how many employers believe this? It is also not evident that hoe many students were not successful at getting jobs. No statistics is provided to support that Alpha university students were successful at getting good jobs. No proof is given to prove how many students of Alpha university got good jobs. Nothing is mentioned regarding recruiters in both the universities are same or not. In addition, it is also not evident that was higher grades the only reason for the students of not getting good jobs.

Moreover, the university decides to terminate the evaluation procedure but did not consider all the apposite reasons behind students are not getting good jobs. It is not evident that terminating the evaluation procedure would lead to students getting good jobs. No figure is provided to support that after terminating the procedure, teachers will not assign higher grades and their efficiency remains intact. It is not evident that students grades will reflect their accurate achievement. No proof to show that employers will start believing again at the students achievement.

In summary, the university did not take into account all the factors possible before terminating the evaluation procedure. The university does not provide any proof to their decisions. If they would have considered all the facts and figures, they could have extrapolated appropriately the reasons behind their students not getting good jobs. The argument should have provided more statistics to bolster their point. Hence, the conclusion to terminate evaluation procedure is unconvincing and thus the argument remains flawed.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 556, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...oyers will start believing again at the students achievement. In summary, the univers...
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Line 11, column 194, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had considered'?
Suggestion: had considered
...e any proof to their decisions. If they would have considered all the facts and figures, they could h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, look, may, moreover, really, regarding, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, in addition, in summary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 28.8173652695 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2695.0 2260.96107784 119% => OK
No of words: 511.0 441.139720559 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27397260274 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.766429827 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 204.123752495 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.379647749511 0.468620217663 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 845.1 705.55239521 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.3863550976 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.9310344828 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6206896552 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72413793103 5.70786347227 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314848583172 0.218282227539 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.093304104674 0.0743258471296 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520700859266 0.0701772020484 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181156525636 0.128457276422 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0427258735618 0.0628817314937 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.3799401198 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 10 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 29 15
No. of Words: 511 350
No. of Characters: 2629 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.755 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.145 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.7 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 201 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 163 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 119 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 72 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.621 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.331 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.552 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.316 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.514 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.086 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5