The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
“Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and
concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village
rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children
living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more
time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This
research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid
and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The
interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will
establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other
island cultures.”
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the
argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Before concluding with dr. Karp's position that his interview-centered method will provide much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions in tertia than dr. field's observation-centered approach, there are some assumptions that we need to address.
First of all, dr. field's observation was made alone and twenty years ago. However, dr. Karp's interview-centered method was executed by a team of his graduate students rather than by himself twenty years later. we do not know whether the child-rearing traditions have been changed within these twenty years due to some siginificant social event or realization such as children exhibiting more externalizing behaviors due to lack of strong attachment and relationship with their biological parents. The newer village adults and parents may have realized this and adopted more family oriented rearing practices rather than entire village oriented rearing practices. if this is true, this will weaken dr. Karp's arguement that his observation-centered approach provides more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions in tertia and other villages.
Another difference is who conducted or rather, who collected the data for the research study. In dr. field's research, he, himself, conducted and collected the data himself by his observation. Of course, this may not be as reliable and valid as other methods of collecting data in this field of area amost the academic community, but this cannot be used as an evidence for dr. Karp's position. if anything, dr. field probably far outstands the education level and experience than any one individual of dr. Karp's graduate students because he has earned his licensure and doctor title for him to lead his own research study. Depending on this difference in educational level and experience between dr. field and dr. field's grdauate students, it may also weaken dr. Karp's arguement.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 290 350
No. of Characters: 1574 1500
No. of Different Words: 157 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.127 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.428 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.236 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 123 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 71 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 36.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 22.365 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.486 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.658 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.276 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: We
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Suggestion: If
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...raditions in tertia and other villages. Another difference is who conducted or r...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, of course, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 55.5748502994 49% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1613.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 290.0 441.139720559 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.56206896552 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23474927216 2.78398813304 116% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568965517241 0.468620217663 121% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 69.1113181115 57.8364921388 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.8947368421 119.503703932 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2631578947 23.324526521 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78947368421 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 20.0 4.67664670659 428% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266610467465 0.218282227539 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.095507931033 0.0743258471296 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0559803064596 0.0701772020484 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181394979598 0.128457276422 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0135409053459 0.0628817314937 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 48.3550499002 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.38 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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