The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
"Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In the above argument, Dr. Karp tries to prove the observation made by Dr. Field on the Tertia island about the child-rearing tradition invalid with his interview-centered approach. Though some of the lines in the argument seem persuasive, there are various illogical fallacies that need to be considered before making a conclusion to employ the interview-centered approach of studying in other island culture.
First of all, The recent interview with children living in a group of the island including Tertia has a flaw in itself. The author specifically wants to assert the child-rearing tradition in Tertia island but, the interview was taken with other island children also. The author also failed to mention how many interviewees participate in the interview. The author should have addressed the extent to which children interview was taken and for the specific set of the participant from the Tertia island before drawing the above conclusion from the argument.
Secondly, The author concludes his interview-centered approach to be better than the observation-centered approach of Dr. Field based on the time children spend talking more about biological parents rather than the other adults of the village. This line can be flawed seriously because the author didn’t address what children were talking about their parents. Are they talking about the absence of their parents while being rared? Are they clueless to talk about their culture in the mass of many interviewees? How old were those children? Were they able to give the interview correct? The author leaves many questions about how and under what circumstance the interview was taken by putting a black box in his argument.
Finally, He can’t conclude his interview-centered approach to be valid in comparison to observation-centered approach without understanding the details of the method applied by Dr. Field. Furthermore, Observation generally takes a long time of study than an interview; that implies, the study done for a longer period of time is more likely to be valid than a study done in short time aka. Interview. Also, the Author mentioned that interview was taken by his team of graduate students but not by himself, which also leaves fallacies in his argument about the validity of the interview.
In light of the above discrepancies, the author’s conclusion based on his argument seems unwarranted. The author should consider correcting his argument to conclude his interview-centered approach a valid method for the further study of other island cultures.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 403 350
No. of Characters: 2103 1500
No. of Different Words: 181 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.48 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.218 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.137 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.211 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.421 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.474 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.381 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.57 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.158 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 190, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...his interview-centered approach. Though some of the lines in the argument seem persuasive, ...
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Line 3, column 262, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...ew was taken with other island children also. The author also failed to mention how ...
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Line 3, column 354, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...erviewees participate in the interview. The author should have addressed the extent...
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Line 7, column 317, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...at implies, the study done for a longer period of time is more likely to be valid than a study...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, while, in short, talking about, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2165.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 402.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3855721393 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23881074657 2.78398813304 116% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457711442786 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.4752785804 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.277777778 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11111111111 5.70786347227 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167086758765 0.218282227539 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0620846667595 0.0743258471296 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0570501396185 0.0701772020484 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105519354177 0.128457276422 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0322554291039 0.0628817314937 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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