The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
"Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The article presented by Dr.Karp, an anthropologist about the child rearing traditions in tertia over 20 years is flawed. The author has compared the methodology opted by himself and Dr.Field adopted about traditions and cultures of tertia island without any statistical information about the population of village, sex ratio aspects. Also he used many ambiguous words while presenting the difference observed during the interview. The author has made a strong conclusion by saying his interview-centered method that his team of graduate students using can draw acurate understanding about child-rearing traditions and cultures across the world.
Firstly, The author has stated the results of Dr.Field's study in the argument about the system adopted by the localites of tertia in child rearing. where he concluded that the children were reared by the entire village than the biological parents alone. This conclusion by Dr.Field can be based on the economic conditions, educational back ground, environment and psycological conditions of the villagers. he hasn't provided any statistical information about the interaction of children to their biological parents was less. Therefore, the author's studies doesn't prove that the Dr.Field's theory as invalid. Indeed, Dr.Karp theory about the children mentioning their biological parents doesn't provided any strong evidence.
Secondly, The author dosen't provided any strong evidences in the argument about the culture or any rearing methods followed by the villagers in the present conditions to support his conclusion to be acccurate.
Further, the vague words used by the author in the argument while proposing his theory to be accurate is not supported by any other examples where his research along with his team of graduates to be accurate in other islands.
As the author fails to include the above mentioned items in the argument. it is not sound or persuasive. To strengthen his theory to be accurate Dr.Karp may provide more information about his theory to conclude that it can be adopted world wide.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 329 350
No. of Characters: 1703 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.259 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.176 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.876 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 132 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.417 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.153 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.418 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.665 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.168 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Karp
The article presented by Dr.Karp, an anthropologist about the child rear...
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Suggestion: Field
...the methodology opted by himself and Dr.Field adopted about traditions and cultures ...
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...lf and Dr.Field adopted about traditions and cultures of tertia island without an...
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Suggestion: Also,
...pulation of village, sex ratio aspects. Also he used many ambiguous words while pres...
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Suggestion: Fields
...The author has stated the results of Dr.Fields study in the argument about the system ...
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...e localites of tertia in child rearing. where he concluded that the children were rea...
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...e localites of tertia in child rearing. where he concluded that the children were rea...
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Suggestion: Field
...al parents alone. This conclusion by Dr.Field can be based on the economic conditions...
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... environment and psycological conditions of the villagers. he hasnt provided any ...
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...cological conditions of the villagers. he hasnt provided any statistical informat...
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Suggestion: hasn't
...ogical conditions of the villagers. he hasnt provided any statistical information ab...
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...ren mentioning their biological parents doesnt provided any strong evidence. Seco...
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Line 17, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
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...s to be accurate in other islands. As the author fails to include the above m...
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... above mentioned items in the argument. it is not sound or persuasive. To strength...
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Suggestion: Karp
...strengthen his theory to be accurate Dr.Karp may provide more information about his ...
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Line 17, column 235, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
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Suggestion: worldwide
...eory to conclude that it can be adopted world wide.
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Line 17, column 235, Rule ID: WORLD_WIDE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'worldwide'?
Suggestion: worldwide
...eory to conclude that it can be adopted world wide.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1755.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 318.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51886792453 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92381305922 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512578616352 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1907070213 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.0 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.25449101796 381% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232584587269 0.218282227539 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0842069218176 0.0743258471296 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.084815658399 0.0701772020484 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116223173628 0.128457276422 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0669503612712 0.0628817314937 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.5979740519 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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