The following appeared in a health newsletter.
"A ten-year nationwide study of the effectiveness of wearing a helmet while bicycling indicates that ten years ago, approximately 35 percent of all bicyclists reported wearing helmets, whereas today that number is nearly 80 percent. Another study, however, suggests that during the same ten-year period, the number of accidents caused by bicycling has increased 200 percent. These results demonstrate that bicyclists feel safer because they are wearing helmets, and they take more risks as a result. Thus, there is clearly a call for the government to strive to reduce the number of serious injuries from bicycle accidents by launching an education program that concentrates on the factors other than helmet use that are necessary for bicycle safety."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The following argument is composed on the serious issue of accidents which are surely increasing day by day. However, the author's argument suggests that the reason for this increase in accidents are solely due to the increase in risk taking capacity of the cyclists because they feels safe while wearing helmets. Although, there could be some more reasons to explain this argument.
First of all author in this argument assumed that responsibility of the accident is only liable to cyclist only. For example there could be a accident between the car and the bicycle but this accident may have arose due to car's driver being drunk.
Another assumption that author has made is that the road conditions remains homogeneous throughout the tenure of 10 years. It may be the case that the quality of road may have been deteriorated through past couple of years due to frequent use and government hasn't spend enough funds in improving the road. Roads which are constructed 10 years ago might not be adequate for today's traffic as the number of vehicles travelling on road may have been increased.
However, it is obvious to assume that there must be a law regarding having a caretaker with the bicyclist of minor age. It is very much possible that this law might have been lifted in recent years due to public demands. This change in laws might have resulted into this drastically increase in amount of accidents.
Thus it is clear that increase in accidents are not only due the the helmets, but it could be explain with some other reasons too. Despite of having various reasons other than the helmet for the accidents of bicyclists, the government should launch education programs that concentrates on all the factors regarding the accidents. This program can also be accompanied with the social fairs in co-ordination with police department of the respective cities to raise the awareness among all type of vehicle drivers.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 123, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ely increasing day by day. However, the authors argument suggests that the reason for t...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 280, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'feel'
Suggestion: feel
...g capacity of the cyclists because they feels safe while wearing helmets. Although, t...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 314, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... they feels safe while wearing helmets. Although, there could be some more reasons to ex...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...re reasons to explain this argument. First of all author in this argument ass...
^^
Line 3, column 143, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...yclist only. For example there could be a accident between the car and the bicycl...
^
Line 3, column 213, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'arisen'.
Suggestion: arisen
... the bicycle but this accident may have arose due to cars driver being drunk. An...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rose due to cars driver being drunk. Another assumption that author has made ...
^^
Line 5, column 261, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hasn't
...ears due to frequent use and government hasnt spend enough funds in improving the roa...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing on road may have been increased. However, it is obvious to assume that th...
^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lly increase in amount of accidents. Thus it is clear that increase in accide...
^^
Line 9, column 3, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...y increase in amount of accidents. Thus it is clear that increase in accidents ...
^^^^
Line 9, column 64, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
... increase in accidents are not only due the the helmets, but it could be explain with s...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 64, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
... increase in accidents are not only due the the helmets, but it could be explain with s...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, regarding, so, thus, while, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1609.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 323.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98142414861 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58388764863 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538699690402 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 705.55239521 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.881712857 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.928571429 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0714285714 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35714285714 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0806238296125 0.218282227539 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0286822402412 0.0743258471296 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0274479495778 0.0701772020484 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0426486842226 0.128457276422 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0133684415071 0.0628817314937 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 123, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ely increasing day by day. However, the authors argument suggests that the reason for t...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 280, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'feel'
Suggestion: feel
...g capacity of the cyclists because they feels safe while wearing helmets. Although, t...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 314, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... they feels safe while wearing helmets. Although, there could be some more reasons to ex...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...re reasons to explain this argument. First of all author in this argument ass...
^^
Line 3, column 143, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...yclist only. For example there could be a accident between the car and the bicycl...
^
Line 3, column 213, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'arisen'.
Suggestion: arisen
... the bicycle but this accident may have arose due to cars driver being drunk. An...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rose due to cars driver being drunk. Another assumption that author has made ...
^^
Line 5, column 261, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hasn't
...ears due to frequent use and government hasnt spend enough funds in improving the roa...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing on road may have been increased. However, it is obvious to assume that th...
^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lly increase in amount of accidents. Thus it is clear that increase in accide...
^^
Line 9, column 3, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...y increase in amount of accidents. Thus it is clear that increase in accidents ...
^^^^
Line 9, column 64, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
... increase in accidents are not only due the the helmets, but it could be explain with s...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 64, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
... increase in accidents are not only due the the helmets, but it could be explain with s...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, regarding, so, thus, while, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1609.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 323.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98142414861 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58388764863 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538699690402 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 705.55239521 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.881712857 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.928571429 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0714285714 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35714285714 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0806238296125 0.218282227539 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0286822402412 0.0743258471296 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0274479495778 0.0701772020484 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0426486842226 0.128457276422 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0133684415071 0.0628817314937 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.