In the argument, the author concludes that a recent article on corporate downsizing is false. He comes to this conclusion based on a recent report, the unemployment rate, and the number of created jobs. While the author’s assertion could prove true, he should provide three pieces of evidence in order to bolster its credibility.
First of all, the author needs to provide evidence regarding the types of ex-employees occupations. It is possible that most people were working in an office or non-industrial jobs which do not require hard work or skillful people. In this case, even providing abundant jobs in the industry, they remain unemployed as it is incompatible with their skills. Moreover, perhaps most people forced to leave their jobs were students. In this case, many students are not able to work in industries that require years of experience and knowledge. They were working in a bar or restaurant, for instance, as it does not require most of the above criteria. Therefore, if the above examples are true, the author’s conclusion would be considerably hampered.
Secondly, the author should provide more data about how the recent survey was conducted. It could be possible that the conductors were negligent and did not consider many people suffering from a lack of jobs. Furthermore, many employees who have lost their jobs may be forced to leave the city in the hope of finding a suitable job. In this case, the unemployment rate did not include them, which led to the unreliability of this survey. In addition, it could be possible that most workers who lost their jobs were coming from adjacent cities; subsequently, the conductors did not consider them as part of their statistics. The author’s assertion does not hold water if either scenario has merit.
Finally, the author should provide evidence regarding the ex-employees job conditions. It might be possible that most of them had a part-time job, as they are students or disabled persons, and now they are undeployed as the market is full of a full-time jobs. In addition, perhaps most of the workers who lost their jobs were heads of their departments or held high positions in their previous careers. However, now most jobs pay above average, which is not proper for them due to their lifestyle. In this case, they cannot pay their expenses if they choose these available jobs. Even maybe they feel shame to interview for these jobs as they were prominent people such as CEO. Assuming either case is valid, the auth’s conclusion would fall apart.
In conclusion, the author’s claim, as it stands now, is significantly flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. Hence, if the author wants to make the prompt more persuasive, he should provide three pieces of evidence regarding the above possibilities.
- The following appeared as a letter to the editor of a national newspaper Your recent article on corporate downsizing in Elthyria maintains that the majority of competent workers who have lost jobs as a result of downsizing face serious economic hardship o 58
- The following appeared in a memo to the board of directors of Bargain Brand Cereals One year ago we introduced our first product Bargain Brand breakfast cereal Our very low prices quickly drew many customers away from the top selling cereal companies A 79
- The following appeared in an article written by Dr Karp an anthropologist quot Twenty years ago Dr Field anoted anthropologist visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his own obseravtions that children in Tertia were rearedby an entire vil 58
- The following appeared as a letter to the editor of a national newspaper Your recent article on corporate downsizing in Elthyria maintains that the majority of competent workers who have lost jobs as a result of downsizing face serious economic hardship o 16
- The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a Batavia newspaper quot The department of agriculture in Batavia reports that the number of dairy farms throughout the country is now 25 percent greater than it was 10 years ago During this same time 79
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 274, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ence regarding the above possibilities.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 28.8173652695 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2349.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 464.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0625 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7931757853 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467672413793 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 715.5 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.4745500403 57.8364921388 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.96 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.56 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.12 5.70786347227 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0912709715486 0.218282227539 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0295323202345 0.0743258471296 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048057403355 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0545575471601 0.128457276422 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0376503879584 0.0628817314937 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 274, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ence regarding the above possibilities.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 28.8173652695 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2349.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 464.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0625 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7931757853 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467672413793 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 715.5 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.4745500403 57.8364921388 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.96 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.56 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.12 5.70786347227 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0912709715486 0.218282227539 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0295323202345 0.0743258471296 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048057403355 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0545575471601 0.128457276422 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0376503879584 0.0628817314937 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.