The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
The memo from the director of student housing indicated that Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories because of the growing-up enrollments. It claimed that the new dormitories are able to accommodate the increasing student number and attract more enrollment during the following years. However, this assumption is flawed and lacks some consideration.
Regarding the growing up enrollments, some students may choose to live on-campus; however, many of them may decide to live off-campus with friends. Although new dormitories will offer the new facilities, there is a variety of renting houses and apartments off-campus for students to select. Further, despite the rising rent for apartments in town, the price may still lower than the dormitories. Therefore, the argument is unpersuasive to build many new dormitories for massive enrollment.
The memo also mentioned that the new dormitories will attract more enrollment during the following years. This statement is also a debatable point. Most of the students come to the college because of its academic reputation and resources rather than just the student housing. The top schools in the world always famous for their successful research and rewards, they are the dream school for many students around the world because they offer the best teaching, research environment and contribution to society. If Buckingham college is able to offer a great academic program, enrollment would increase inevitably.
Consequently, it is easy to conclude that the argument failed to prove that building a number of dormitories is necessary. The new dormitories can adopt the incoming student, but it lacks credibility to state the population will double over due to the attractive housing buildings, and it can not guaranty that all enrollment will stay the on-campus housing no matter the concern of price or facilities.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 292 350
No. of Characters: 1559 1500
No. of Different Words: 150 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.134 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.339 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.865 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 120 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.857 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.92 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.643 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.544 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.079 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, may, regarding, so, still, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1599.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 292.0 441.139720559 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47602739726 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97464381351 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 204.123752495 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520547945205 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.0442438914 57.8364921388 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.214285714 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8571428571 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28571428571 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.353493971546 0.218282227539 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122700905001 0.0743258471296 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.136151939656 0.0701772020484 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231368427169 0.128457276422 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128806262231 0.0628817314937 205% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 12.5979740519 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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