The following appeared in a memo from the new vice president of Sartorian, a company that manufactures men's clothing.
"Five years ago, at a time when we had difficulty obtaining reliable supplies of high-quality wool fabric, we discontinued production of our popular alpaca overcoat. Now that we have a new fabric supplier, we should resume production. Given the outcry from our customers when we discontinued this product and the fact that none of our competitors offers a comparable product, we can expect pent-up consumer demand for our alpaca coats. Due to this demand and the overall increase in clothing prices, we can predict that Sartorian's alpaca overcoats will be more profitable than ever before."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The author of the memo predicts that Sartorian's alpaca overcoats will be more profitable than ever before. To buttress his argument, the author cites the following evidences: first, they have new fabric supplier; second, consumer demands for their alpaca coats will increase; finally, overall increase in clothing prices is evident. While it might be true that continuing alpaca overcoats will increase profit in this company, the conclusion is not convincing due to several unanswered questions.
To begin with, the first question requires answer is that whether new fabric supplier can produce ...
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 628 350
No. of Characters: 3251 1500
No. of Different Words: 279 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.006 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.177 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.49 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 257 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 182 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 124 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 68 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.545 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.963 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.773 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.3 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.486 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.092 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 123, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...ier can produce coat with high quality. if this new supplier is very reliable afte...
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Line 3, column 762, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: After
...nnot work well after long-time suspend. after firing out previous experts in operatin...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 1041, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...aluate the credibility of the argument. Moreover, the author should answer quest...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 141, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Are
...How many people outcry for their coats? are they still doing so after five years? i...
^^^
Line 7, column 183, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...e they still doing so after five years? if the company has drawn sticky consumers ...
^^
Line 7, column 710, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
..., as people divert to more chic styles. it is also plausible that due to global wa...
^^
Line 7, column 967, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...duce old-fashioned wool fabric clothes. last but not least, the question that wh...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Last
...fashioned wool fabric clothes. last but not least, the question that whethe...
^^^^
Line 11, column 518, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...rowded out and sales would not be high. Whats more, when we consider the profit, we s...
^^^^^
Line 11, column 966, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... also boom, after accounting for costs. To sum up, as it stands, the conclusion ...
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Line 13, column 84, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...relied on several unanswered questions. it might make sense that they can gain mor...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, still, then, therefore, well, while, for example, in addition, as well as, on the contrary, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 35.0 12.9520958084 270% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 28.8173652695 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3351.0 2260.96107784 148% => OK
No of words: 628.0 441.139720559 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33598726115 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.00598923014 4.56307096286 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58809793927 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 306.0 204.123752495 150% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487261146497 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 1006.2 705.55239521 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 13.0 2.70958083832 480% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.8017416436 57.8364921388 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.551724138 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6551724138 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75862068966 5.70786347227 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13373318266 0.218282227539 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0383241348101 0.0743258471296 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0349266280347 0.0701772020484 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0841899480865 0.128457276422 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0285782245105 0.0628817314937 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 144.0 98.500998004 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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