In the stated argument, the author compared a work of two companies in terms of giving support to laid-off employees. Suggested two companies, Delany Personnel Firm and Walsh Personnel firm, are assisting the laid-off employees to create resumes and developing interview skills. The author describes the work of Delany as better than that of Walsh and gives an opinion to continue with the Delany as compared to less expensive form Walsh.
The Author mentions here that the performance of Delany, which is currently working with the company XYZ, is satisfactory. The author described the efficiency of Delany in terms of quick performance only. Despite having better performance, it also should be economical. There is a possibility that employees had personally paid to the company to enhance their profile.
The Author compared both the forms economically and suggested to consider Walsh to gain economic profit before claiming that though economical, it is not having better performance. The Author has given supporting reasons by stating that earlier performance of Walsh was not satisfactory and only half of the laid-off workers succeded. In terms of superiority and staff size also, Delany is better than Walsh. In terms of work performance, Walsh was behind Delany and took nine months time to get laid off employees job as compared to six months time taken by Delany.
Thus, despite being economical, it is not viable to choose Walsh only because of financial reason. They must consider performance as a factor in hiring a firm. The Authors reasons are reasonable and I personally agree with him/her.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
it is off the topic.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 260 350
No. of Characters: 1322 1500
No. of Different Words: 131 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.016 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.085 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.709 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 106 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 70 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.571 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.543 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.214 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.375 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.579 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.109 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 124, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... with the company XYZ, is satisfactory. The author described the efficiency of Dela...
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Line 5, column 53, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggested considering'.
Suggestion: suggested considering
...ompared both the forms economically and suggested to consider Walsh to gain economic profit before cl...
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Line 7, column 173, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'reason'.
Suggestion: reason
... a factor in hiring a firm. The Authors reasons are reasonable and I personally agree w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, so, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.9520958084 15% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1360.0 2260.96107784 60% => OK
No of words: 259.0 441.139720559 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25096525097 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79972036673 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 204.123752495 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528957528958 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 423.9 705.55239521 60% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.0770304208 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.1428571429 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 5.70786347227 18% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187711692317 0.218282227539 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0684340913983 0.0743258471296 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0896967187268 0.0701772020484 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113381878291 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0794611769997 0.0628817314937 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 98.500998004 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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