The following appeared as part of an article on government funding of environmental regulatory agencies.
“When scientists finally learn how to create large amounts of copper from other chemical elements, the regulation of copper mining will become unnecessary. For one thing, since the amount of potentially available copper will no longer be limited by the quantity of actual copper deposits, the problem of overmining will quickly be eliminated altogether. For another, manufacturers will not need to use synthetic copper substitutes, the production of which creates pollutants. Thus, since two problems will be settled—overmining and pollution—it makes good sense to reduce funding for mining regulation and either save the money or reallocate it where it is needed more.”
Discuss how well reasoned... etc.
The argument claims that developing artificial copper may eliminate the need for actual copper, mined from the mines. Stated in this way, the argument lacks several key linkages, which strengthen our belief in the outcome suggested by the author. The claim suffers from inadequate reasoning and lack of factual support and directly jumps on to the conclusion to reallocate the funds for copper mining, which is unconvincing.
First, the author takes for granted the value addition original copper and copper mining brings to the society – such as re-vitalization of the copper mines, usage of original copper metal in kitchen utensils and health benefits of the metal. The author tends to ignore the fact that original copper metal has multiple health benefit, which artificial copper cannot provide. Concluding the copper mining unnecessary is a claim that is ill—founded and not well researched.
Second, the argument makes a giant leap to conclude that overmining can be mitigated by the use of artificial copper. The author clearly does not take into account the present and future market demand of original copper. This argument could have been well reasoned if the author had presented some data points related to the usage of copper in the society along with proportion of projected demand of original versus artificial copper.
Third, author of this arguments makes another ill-reasoned claim about the usage of pollutants in the copper mining process. This claim is ill-reasoned because of two reasons – Primary, there is no clear mention of the process, which is used for developing artificial copper and hence no mention of the harmful pollutants this new process may generate; Secondary, the amount of produce is not compared for the subject being discussed i.e. what will the quantity of artificial cotton be if the program is successful versus what is the current and forecasted quantity of original cotton produce. Without comparing both the quantities there is not enough factual support for the claim to be believed.
In conclusion, the argument is flawed for the above mentioned reasons and is therefore unconvincing. Ong stretched claims and unfounded assumption have weakened our belied in the claims by the author. In order to establish the merits of a certain policy/innovation it essential to present all the details of contributions factors, which is missing from the argument.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 384 350
No. of Characters: 1980 1500
No. of Different Words: 186 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.427 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.156 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.623 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 167 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.156 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.533 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.375 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.619 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.11 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 18, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...s artificial copper. Third, author of this arguments makes another ill-reasoned cl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, third, well, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2035.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 384.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29947916667 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7754308662 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502604166667 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 627.3 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 93.4576315177 57.8364921388 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.666666667 119.503703932 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13333333333 5.70786347227 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143493470842 0.218282227539 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0604013349508 0.0743258471296 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0492179030738 0.0701772020484 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0893153706209 0.128457276422 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508068514683 0.0628817314937 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 98.500998004 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.