The following appears in a letter to the editor for the West Lansburg News:
"The tufted groundhog lives in the coastal wetlands of West Lansburg. Ancient records suggest that the tufted groundhog once numbered in the millions. Since they were declared a wildlife sanctuary in 2004, development along the coastal wetlands has been prohibited. Now local development interests are lobbying for the West Lansburg council to allow an access road to be built along the edge of wetlands. Neighboring Eastern Carpenteria, which had a similar sanctuary, has seen its sea otter population decline since the repeal of its sanctuary status in 1978. In order to preserve the region's biodiversity and ensure a healthy environment, the West Lansburg council should not allow the road to be built."
The author of the passage states that, in order to preserve the sanctity of the environment and protect the region's biodiversity, a road should not be allowed to be built on the costal wetlands of West Lanburg. The author draws this conclusion based on facts like comparison to the population of sea otters, the effects of the repeal on the neighboring land, and effects observed on the biodiversity in Eastern Carpentia. But before this argument can be evaluated, three questions must be answered.
First, how is the population of sea otters and tufted groundhogs comparable? A decrease in number of sea otters from 1978 can be caused due to other reasons. Perhaps there was a fatal disease going around the sea otter community which led to a massive decrease in the population. It could also be the case that a new predator of the sea otter entered the sanctuary and wreaked havoc on the population. If either of the two scenarios was true, the argument is significantly weakened.
Second, is a repeal in sanctuary status similar to building a road along the edge? These two are very different circumstances. The author states that the sanctuary status of East Carpentia was repealed. A repeal in sanctuary status can imply less regulations by the government in that area, and perhaps the illegal poaching of sea otters markedly increased during this time. Additionally, it is possible that since the sanctuary's status has been repealed, the population of the sea otters was not scrutinized and the sea otters might have migrated to other area. If this turns out to be the case, the conclusion does not hold merit.
Third, how are the sanctuaries of the land of East Carpentia and West Lanburg comparable? East Carpentia had the sanctuary in 1978 and the current sanctuary in West Lanburg could be drastically different from former mentioned sanctuary. Maybe West Lanburg has better trained employees who take care of the tufted groundhogs compared to East Carpentia. There may have been remarkable advances in the field of veterinary sciences which could provide better practices of taking care of wild animals and West Lanburg's sanctuary has diligently applied these strategies. If the above is true, the argument does not hold water.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stand now, is significantly flawed due to its reliance on the above stated unwarranted assumptions. If the author can provide more information (perhaps in the form of a systematic research study), it is possible to properly, and fully, evaluate the validity of the argument.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 422 350
No. of Characters: 2084 1500
No. of Different Words: 195 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.532 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.938 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.763 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 90 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.095 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.546 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.524 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.309 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.525 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.087 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 109, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'regions'' or 'region's'?
Suggestion: regions'; region's
...tity of the environment and protect the regions biodiversity, a road should not be allo...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 243, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun regulations is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... A repeal in sanctuary status can imply less regulations by the government in that a...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, third, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2142.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 422.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07582938389 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84748944373 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478672985782 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 662.4 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2847567896 57.8364921388 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.0 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0952380952 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.80952380952 5.70786347227 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0733219857327 0.218282227539 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0250540536465 0.0743258471296 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0436942198636 0.0701772020484 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.03794700845 0.128457276422 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0361554050697 0.0628817314937 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 98.500998004 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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