The following is an excerpt from a speech given to the School Board about a change to the curriculum:
"Because the future will be dominated by technology, we must make four years of computer programming mandatory for all high school students. If our students take these classes, they’ll all be able to get high-paying programming jobs and lead fulfilling lives because software engineers and data scientists have the best job prospects and salaries. Therefore, we must educate our students so they can secure these kinds of jobs. Even if they pursue other careers, programming will still benefit them, given that all industries are becoming more technological."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The advent of technology has unarguably revolutionized the world with tremendous potential to create more impacts in the coming years in all ramifications. It is crucial for all individuals to have a good usage of technological advances but not necessarily the mechanisms of developments. The author belief on making computer programming mandatory for high school students is rife and unfounded with lots of generalizations.
To start with, the author assumed that only computer programmers would have a good use of technological advancements is incorrect. Truthfully, computer may have an edge in understanding the backend mechanisms but may lack the understanding the user interface. A typical example is CAD-RC which is an AutoCAD plug-in software for the steel or reinforcement detailing of structurally designed structures. It is no gainsaying that a computer programmer that does not have an understanding of the Civil Engineering symbols coupled with the software interface would be find wanting in the software usage. Although, the software was developed through programming but enormous data was provided by Civil Engineers in achieving such feats.
The writer clearly clearly stated that software engineers and data scientists have the best job prospects. This is vague with no evidence to back up this claim. In Nigeria, the total monthly allowance of Senators is approximately one-hundred thousand dollars. A large chunk of this elected politicians does not have any programming knowledge, even some does not have a degree. Only a negligible amount of programmers in the world have a monthly take home of over one-hundred thousand dollars. Politics is just an example, there are other fields that have more paying prospects than software engineers and data scientists.
From the last example, the author assumed data scientists have the best paying prospects alongside software engineers. It is true that that software engineers need profound understanding of programming which is not necessary for data scientists. It is therefore contradictory for the author to place the possibility of being the students being a future data scientists on computer programming.
The author also assumed that the only criteria in getting a good paying job as a software engineer or data scientist is based on computer programming alone. With the ever rising competition in the world, potential employees are expected to posses varieties of skills beyond technical skills to rise above the competitions. Leadership skills, communication skills, interpersonal skills are major examples.
The significant of programming in technology cannot be overemphasized but the author assumptions as the need to mandate computer programming course for four years are illogical and unfounded.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 10 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 422 350
No. of Characters: 2317 1500
No. of Different Words: 205 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.532 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.491 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.185 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 176 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 144 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 118 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 85 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.095 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.264 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.381 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.31 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.562 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 12, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: clearly
... in achieving such feats. The writer clearly clearly stated that software engineers and data...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, therefore, even so, it is true, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2368.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 422.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.61137440758 5.12650576532 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2581551026 2.78398813304 117% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492890995261 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 731.7 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.0474421562 57.8364921388 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 112.761904762 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0952380952 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.28571428571 5.70786347227 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174236628952 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0554687885906 0.0743258471296 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0716370478654 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112593715412 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0822560207474 0.0628817314937 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 12.5979740519 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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