The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books.
"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The argument states that opening a cafe and closing the children's books section in order top attract more customers seems illogical,and also it has many assumptions and loop holes in it which could lead to the fallible conclusion.
Monarch being a well known bookstore for almost twenty years says that how popular it was,and in order to make it more attractive to people opening a cafe might not be good solution.Instead they can open their book stores in various locations and can attract people to their shops by organizing events,and also by making people meet their favourite writers would gain much more enthusiasm for people to come to their shops.And also they can increase their popularity by organizing book fairs in schools and colleges so that children and students get exposed to various books written by their favourite writes.
And by discontinuing the childrens section from the store does not seems to be good idea,because children are being more into the comics and cartoons,they can provide the store a great income.And also by the children,we mean their parents also.When they come with their children,there might be chances that they are also interested in some of their favourite books and which in turn increases their profit.
On the contrary side opening a cafe might not yield the profit they need without the above mentioned reasons.
Instead of discontinuing the childrens section for the sake of cafe,monarch can be wise enough in oepning a cafe and which also includes childrens book store by planning very prudently and in turn they can make their respective bussiness lucrative,when compared to Regal book stores.
Therefore,in order for the Monarch book stores to be more attractive,the above mentioned reasons can be assumed.Otherwise based on the argument presented above due to the illogical and false assumptions which has some loop holes in it cannot yield what they are looking for,and without the above stated reasons presented in the argument it can be unsubstantiated and can lead to debate abour their attractiveness to people in various locations.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 15
No. of Words: 356 350
No. of Characters: 1726 1500
No. of Different Words: 157 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.344 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.848 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.477 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 111 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 50.857 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 25.464 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.482 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.906 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.132 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Instead
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...ople to their shops by organizing events,and also by making people meet their favour...
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Suggestion: And
...siasm for people to come to their shops.And also they can increase their popularity...
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Line 9, column 193, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
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...ake their respective bussiness lucrative,when compared to Regal book stores. The...
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Line 19, column 113, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
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Suggestion: Otherwise,
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Line 19, column 324, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ut the above stated reasons presented in the argument it can be unsubstantiated a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, look, so, therefore, thus, well, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1775.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 339.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23598820059 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93223055044 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466076696165 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.67365269461 418% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 19.7664670659 30% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 56.0 22.8473053892 245% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 161.326790501 57.8364921388 279% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 295.833333333 119.503703932 248% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 56.5 23.324526521 242% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.70786347227 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 24.0 5.25449101796 457% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12462193781 0.218282227539 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0721257972867 0.0743258471296 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0307713746805 0.0701772020484 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0721257972867 0.128457276422 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0307713746805 0.0628817314937 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.5 14.3799401198 219% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 14.64 48.3550499002 30% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 25.1 12.197005988 206% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.0 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.05 8.32208582834 121% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 12.3882235529 218% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 24.4 11.1389221557 219% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 27.0 11.9071856287 227% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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