The following recommendation was made by the president and administrative staff of Grove College, a private institution, to the college's governing committee.
"Recently, there have been discussions about ending Grove College's century-old tradition of all-female education by admitting male students into our programs. At a recent faculty meeting, a majority of faculty members voted in favor of co-education, arguing that it would encourage more students to apply to Grove. However, Grove students, both past and present, are against the idea of coeducation. Eighty percent of the students responding to a survey conducted by the student government wanted the school to remain all female, and over half of the alumnae who answered a separate survey also opposed coeducation. Therefore, we recommend maintaining Grove College's tradition of all-female education. We predict that keeping the college all-female will improve morale among students and convince alumnae to keep supporting the college financially."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author states that the college's governing committee should adhere to the college's old tradition of all-female education as it will improve student morale and convince the alumnae to keep supporting the college financially. The author has provided that a majority of the faculty members are in accordance with the decision that college's governing committee is about to make whereas the students and alumnae are against this decision. The author also states that studies were conducted to gain students and alumnae opinions on this particular decision. In my opinion, the following recommendation made by president of Grove college does not hold any water and needs to answer these three questions.
Firstly, Can we say that the consensus shown by the faculty members was their own will? Or Can we say that all faculty members were present in the meeting? There is a possibility where faculty members might have to agree with the college's governing board as not agreeing might risk them their job. It is possible that only some of the faculty members were present that day. If any of this is true, the authors claim is weakened.
Secondly, Should we rely on the data provided by the survey? It might be possible that the survey conducted among the students recieved a low response and among them 80 percent have agreed to follow old tradition. There might be a similar case with the survey conducted for the alumnae. The lack of data given by the author raises these questions and if any of these possibilities turn out to be true then author cannot state his conclusion based on this result.
Thirdly, Can we really say that keeping the college all-female would boost the morale of students and convince alumnae to support? There is a possibility where morality is based on a reason other than keeping the college all-female. It might be possible that the morale of students is low due to high pressure related to studies. It can be true that the alumnae will still support the college financially even if it changes to co-education. These possibilities can weaken authors position and prediction.
Lastly, the author needs to answer the above questions before reaching any conclusion. The author needs to provide multiple evidences related to studies conducted on students and alumnae. The author needs to prove that the morality of students depends only on the factor that school will remain all-female. If the author can provide such things, he can come to a conclusion and strengthen it with apt evidences.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 12 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 420 350
No. of Characters: 2065 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.527 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.917 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.557 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 159 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 123 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.091 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.185 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.322 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.546 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.168 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 438, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... and alumnae are against this decision. The author also states that studies were co...
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Line 3, column 324, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...hem their job. It is possible that only some of the faculty members were present that day. ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, lastly, really, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, whereas, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2106.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 420.0 441.139720559 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01428571429 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62395643872 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.442857142857 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 661.5 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.5351104203 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7272727273 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0909090909 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22727272727 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181630475932 0.218282227539 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0541192957985 0.0743258471296 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0786933263911 0.0701772020484 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103412740827 0.128457276422 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103991555383 0.0628817314937 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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