Monarch Books is having 20 years of business in bookselling. The author stated that it is having large customer base because of a wide range of books. The reason why they wanted to open a cafe is not mentioned in the paragraph. It is not known here that Regal Books is having comparable revenue as Monarch or not. Further, the reason that why Regal Books had started Cafe is also unknown. These reasons lead to further discussion on the topic and led the author's recommendation as a weak solution.
First question arises is that why Monarch wants to open a cafe if it's revenue is increasing. If it's revenue is decreasing then they should consider other aspects, too. A decrease in revenue cannot be concluded from the declination of a population. There might be a possibility of an increase in customers of other genres. So, revenue details should be mentioned in the paragraph to discuss further. We can assume if Monarch is having large customer base than Regal. It should also be known if customers of Regal are liking the idea of Cafe inside bookstore or not. People have many cafes to visit for, there would be competition in that as well.
Despite the declination in population, If Monarch is having a fair amount of child customers, It will lead to the decreased revenue as they will lose some customers. The Author had not shown any firm reason if people will love the idea of the cafe inside a bookstore. So, discontinuing children's section might cost them losing customers ad decrease in revenue. Instead, they should improve range of children's books to attract more people. In conclusion, Monarch should analyze different aspects of this and should conclude accordingly.
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Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 288 350
No. of Characters: 1369 1500
No. of Different Words: 145 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.12 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.753 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.611 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 102 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 72 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 42 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.158 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.03 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.318 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.442 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.075 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 456, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...her discussion on the topic and led the authors recommendation as a weak solution. F...
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Line 3, column 514, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...uld also be known if customers of Regal are liking the idea of Cafe inside bookstore or no...
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Line 5, column 328, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'customers'' or 'customer's'?
Suggestion: customers'; customer's
...hildrens section might cost them losing customers ad decrease in revenue. Instead, they s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, first, if, so, then, well, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1400.0 2260.96107784 62% => OK
No of words: 288.0 441.139720559 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86111111111 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69000206526 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 204.123752495 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510416666667 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 705.55239521 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 21.9288701547 57.8364921388 38% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 73.6842105263 119.503703932 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1578947368 23.324526521 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.10526315789 5.70786347227 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235371959957 0.218282227539 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0781295225437 0.0743258471296 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0713223274648 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16169934877 0.128457276422 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0653414196166 0.0628817314937 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 14.3799401198 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 48.3550499002 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.197005988 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 98.500998004 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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