An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The recommendation contains a lot of vague terms that need to be addressed. On the major side, it fails to address both the validity of millet consisting high degree of Vitamin and farmers ability to use it.
The recommendation on the first hand should is doubtful on the ground of validity that millet is not Vitamin A deficient. What was the engineering process used to prove that millet contains high degree of vitamin A? Has that engineering been cross checked by other organizations to prove its fidelity? Even this hypothesis is assumed to be true, has it been proved by using millet in fields that have conditions equivalent to the conditions in Tagus fields? If millet has proved to be efficient in fields that does not resemble that of Tagus's fields, so it is worthless to use, because environmental conditions play vital role in use of any seed. However, if the millet proves to be valid in all of above scenarios then there are other considerations that come into play.
Considering the assumption as true that millet contains high degree of Vitamin A and it can combat the deficiency faced in Tagus then there comes the cost factor that needs to be addressed. The recommendation suggests that there is more cost in use millet but how much more cost is it? Even after paying subsidies, will the farmers be able to pay the remaining cost? Or will they be willing in paying such cost? Undoubtedly, if the farmers will not be able to pay amount for such seed or cannot produce the yield that they expect, it will be a huge burden for them to introduce such seed. However, if the cost comes to be very less then it government should be involved in introducing millet into the country.
Is it just fine to see the positive side of using any seed? Definitely not. In this world, everything has pros and cons. The recommendation does not address any side effects related to using millet. If using that seed proves to be life threatening for farmers then definitely it should be avoided. Even if not life threatening their may be other factors that prove their disadvantages and such factors if outweigh the advantage of single advantage of combating Vitamin A then it is again worthless to use it. Therefore, it is necessary to be addressed the disadvantages of using millet as well.
From the scenarios, we can conclude that it is necessary to evaluate the validity of millet, the ability of farmers to afford it and side effects of using it. If the response to all of these questions is positive, only then the government of Tagus should invest in promoting millet into the country.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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samples:
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 454 350
No. of Characters: 2095 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.616 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.615 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.691 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.636 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.276 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.298 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.498 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.097 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 45, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'be'
Suggestion: be
...recommendation on the first hand should is doubtful on the ground of validity that...
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Line 2, column 110, Rule ID: DT_JJ_NO_NOUN[1]
Message: Probably a noun is missing in this part of the sentence.
... of validity that millet is not Vitamin A deficient. What was the engineering process used ...
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Line 3, column 632, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[2]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...ever, if the cost comes to be very less then it government should be involved in int...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2139.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 454.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71145374449 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73194623759 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.420704845815 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 684.0 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2962866037 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.2272727273 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6363636364 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 5.70786347227 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294359079786 0.218282227539 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0967982118171 0.0743258471296 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053657115085 0.0701772020484 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17177820734 0.128457276422 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0638364106403 0.0628817314937 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.3799401198 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.5979740519 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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