Last year, Kensington Academy turned over management of its cafeteria to a private vendor, Swift Nutrition. This company serves low-fat, low-calorie meals that students do not find enjoyable – my son and several of his friends came home yesterday complaining about the lunch options. While the intent of hiring Swift may have been to cause students to eat healthier foods, the plan is just going to cause students to bring their own, less healthy lunches instead of eating cafeteria food. If Swift is not replaced with another vendor, there will be serious health consequences for Kensington students.
The argument concludes that, Swift Nutrition serves meals that the students do not enjoy and there will be serious health consequencies for Kensington students if Swift vendor is not changed. The reasoning on this is logically flawed, however, because there are a lot of assumptions based on the biased number of reports gotten which appear to be invalid.
To begin with, the parent states that Swift Nutrition serves low-fat, low-calorie meals which are healthy meals. It is possible that the students prefer to eat fatty foods and high calorie meals, but this does not make the meals healthy. The intent of Kensington Academy was to cause students to eat healthier foods, it did not clearly state that the students have to like it or not. Although it will be more valued if the students like it.
Yet another problem with this argument is that the parent is giving a myopic view about the meals. There was no statistical data of the percentage of the students that do not like the meals. The parent's assumption was based on his or her son and friends' perception of the meals. It could be that the students are not used to those particular meals and they just did not like it, so they could not find the meals enjoyable.
Furthermore, the parent assummed that the healthy meals will cause serious healthy consequences for the students. I believe this statement is in the negative, that is, it will affect their health. It does not seem plausible that healthy meals can affect the health, that being said, it still does not ascertain the impossibilites. The healthy meals may affect students who find it difficult to adjust to new foods. There is a general believe that healthy foods do not contain so much allergies, so these meals may not have much effect on students who have allergies.
In conclusion, because the argument makes several assumptions that can not be proved statistically, tgo strengthen the argument, the school should consider giving out questionnaires to the students about the meal and the vendor to be able to verify if the problem is from the meals or the vendors or perhaps, there is no problem at all. Without this evidence, the conclusion of the argument reamins invalid.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 377 350
No. of Characters: 1783 1500
No. of Different Words: 162 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.406 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.729 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.509 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 121 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.176 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.607 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.647 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.369 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.597 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.128 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 196, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
...tudents that do not like the meals. The parents assumption was based on his or her son ...
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Line 7, column 480, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ve that healthy foods do not contain so much allergies, so these meals may not have ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, then, as to, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1834.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 377.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86472148541 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58802221537 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461538461538 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.620126771 57.8364921388 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.882352941 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1764705882 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.17647058824 5.70786347227 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239687700078 0.218282227539 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0791486776973 0.0743258471296 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0665182922257 0.0701772020484 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139599680067 0.128457276422 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.06151868983 0.0628817314937 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 48.3550499002 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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