"Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that the person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cann

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"Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that the person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot permit inoculations against cow flu to be routinely administered." - Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument

Cow flu is one of the risk factors for disease and death among people living in these areas. Although many lives could be saved by providing vaccination against the cow flu, but the possibility of death from cow flu is relatively rare. Thus, permission for routine administration is the choice as suggested by author. To sate in this way, the author failed to mention several factors that may be needed to strengthen the argument. Moreover, the argument seems rely on assumptions which lack concrete evidence. Thus, the argument is weak. Unconvincing and has many flaws.
First of all, the author claimed that many live could be saved if vaccination would be provided against cow flu routinely. This statement lack clear evidences. The source of information is dubious. It is still unknown whether cow flu is really dangerous to human and inoculation against cow flu is really required. Does vaccination has the potency to prevent human beings to get suffered from diseases and ailments?
Secondly, whether the areas only where cow flu is detected needed administration of inoculation or other areas should be provided with vaccination as a prophylactic care should be studied and mentioned.
Additionally, the author purported that there is a small possibility of death cause of cow flu. The argument seems weak as no evidence substantiating the fact. Was any research conducted in laboratory where human were injected with the flue organism to see what are the side effects of flu on human body? Moreover, even if death is not the possible adverse effect of cow flu, does it cause a permanent damage to nervous system, cardiac system or any other systems of our body? Though small, what is the percentage of death by flu was not mentioned in the argument.
Finally, the death may not be fulminant , rather it may take several days to years to have adverse effect on human body that was not observed. May be these areas do not require a routine inoculation but at times when the flu flare up do they need vaccination is still unknown.
To summaries, although it was stated that inoculation against flu should not be routinely administered as there is lesser degree of possibilities of death, however the argument is flawed as having assumptions only. Therefore, it is weak, unconvincing. The argument could be strengthened if a in-depth research will be conducted and a detail knowledge be gained.

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...ucted and a detail knowledge be gained.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, thus, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.6327345309 173% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2005.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 400.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0125 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85896276195 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.2652393314 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.1739130435 119.503703932 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3913043478 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26086956522 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.25449101796 324% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 17.0 6.88822355289 247% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29463267407 0.218282227539 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0807696415678 0.0743258471296 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0762775287626 0.0701772020484 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161023564409 0.128457276422 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0469972161314 0.0628817314937 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 12.3882235529 48% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 400 350
No. of Characters: 1952 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.472 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.88 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.79 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 136 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.391 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.761 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.609 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.29 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.508 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.051 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5